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Chris Goodman
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since 2000-01-28
Posts 92
Issaquah, Washington usa

0 posted 2000-02-20 01:18 PM


I walked into the room
& felt a familiar breeze
its warmth touched
the back of my neck
& tickled my memory
by the time I had
to leave
it was hanging around the
front of my grandmas yard
by the dead rose beds
it touched me again
but this time on the cheek
the kiss is what i think
it was & it was meant for
me
she went in and came back
out as quickly as the breeze

This poem wasn't meant for structure or probably critical analysis.  But I like to get feedback.
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 Blue Moon


[This message has been edited by Chris Goodman (edited 02-20-2000).]

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Tony Di Bart
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since 2000-01-26
Posts 160
Toronto, Canada
1 posted 2000-02-20 06:12 PM


I like the poem or what ever you would likt to call. You really had my curiosity peak
with the description of the breeze.  I think you should expand this poem even further.

THanks

Chris Goodman
Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 92
Issaquah, Washington usa
2 posted 2000-02-20 06:23 PM


Hi,
I planned on just that.  Expanding, but when I went to delete it & add to it I wasn't allowed.  Anyway, thanks.
Chris

 Blue Moon

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