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the day they put up the cell tower
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the day they put up the cell tower |
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7 Member
since 2000-04-26
Posts 113Amherst, MA, USA |
cell phones tired of ringing clinging take me away but put me back right on this road in the center of town the clock tower cracks too much radiation give us our air back no i will NOT wait three seconds! |
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paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. |
Is'nt it ironic that the people who love their cell phones scream the loudest when they put up a relay tower to handle the usage.Bravo!.Now sock it to the idiots who talk on their cell phones while driving a car and take them to the movies. paladin |
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hush Senior Member
since 2001-05-27
Posts 1653Ohio, USA |
I think you have a good flow here- the phrases and rhymes you use are sharp, concise and powerful. The bit about the clock tower was a little confusing though.... I wasn't sure exactly what a cell tower is? If it's a tower to help transmit cell phone calls, I sure haven't heard of them yet... and clock tower threw me off more, outside of the reference to time people are afraid to waste by making a call on a stationary phone... You are more than the sum of what you consume |
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