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jwesley
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

0 posted 2021-03-28 08:10 PM


Trite And Cliched


I try so hard
trying not to be trite,
to avoid cliches,
to be fresh
in the words
I put to paper -

I've learned it's an almost
impossible task.

Sometimes I want to say
I  love  you
in a way that just
blows your mind
puts chill bumps
up and down your spine,
elicits a smile
that spreads heat
to the core of your soul.

Sometimes I want you to know,
so badly,
it brings me to tears
because I've failed
to convey the depths
of my heart.

Sometimes I just want
to turn you inside out,
have you grasping
at the space between us,
have us merge
till you don't know
where you end,
and I begin.

Sometimes I want
you to feel,
what I feel,
through the words
from me
and the paper in your hand.

It's trite, I know,
so cliche,
but I don't know
any other way to say it . . .

I . . . love . . . you
I just love you -
that's all.

.
© wesley james beard, jr.
march 28, 2021




© Copyright 2021 Wesley James Beard, Jr. - All Rights Reserved
Paul Wilson
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1 posted 2021-03-28 10:36 PM


James...I love you are 3 mighty words when it comes from the heart. Enjoyed. Those 3 words were the first 3 words I said to my soon to be wife 52 years ago...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825
by the sea
2 posted 2021-03-29 03:39 AM


how touching a declaration can be, the words will warm her soul and heart, so nice and to be repeated,


yann

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US
3 posted 2021-04-03 12:08 PM


THAT could Never be Trite or Cliche,
just a.. Melt.. with Warm Tears.

Lovely..

Sky~

~Do You Know That Feeling
Of Just Wanting To Get Lost
In a Starry night~..


Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
4 posted 2021-04-03 07:10 PM


You indeed met the need of the power of the word, Sir.
Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
5 posted 2021-04-19 09:15 PM


Um...this was anything but trite, but I think you knew that.  Very well written piece.
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