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The Blues and The Grey
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The Blues and The Grey |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL 
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Feeling less than motivated she turns words in her mind. The savage of the empty has crept up stolen sense of purpose and all seems lost to numbness. Succumbing to familiar comforts, watching the sky at night while absently pleased that the streetlight is out again, she just breathes in air and smoke. Life on idle with hope burning out against the horizon of forever. "I know this love will tear me to pieces |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I used to hate idleness. Think it wears on you after awhile. Grows to an inability to care, even. Relate to a lot of this, but the naming of blue and grey in the title has me curious? |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Lady T...I must say the twists and turns in this piece leads me down a few different roads. Enjoyed very much...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ Paul |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Michael, Thank you. Idle and I have never been good friends. We're just familiar with one another. I have done things that I regret after too long in that state of mind and life. I usually title my poems after I write them, but with this one, I titled it before I wrote it. I had a destination in mind that I failed to reach. That'll teach me! lol! In my mind "The Blues" was a bit of sarcasm about feeling the blues (although there is no way this is even close to the idea of "bluesy" as far as musically). "The grey" was about being somewhere in the middle of multiple emotions because of the numbness. The whole title was originally meant to be followed with thought on if I were feeling "blue", was I truly numb. None of this, as you can see, made it into the poem. I guess, if I'm not going to expand on any of that with the poem, it needs another title. "I know this love will tear me to pieces |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Paul, Thank you. I am interested in hearing about those roads though.  "I know this love will tear me to pieces |
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Gunslinger Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 901TX, USA |
The good thing about idling, is that the motor is still running, and you can always give it the gas. Great write! |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I feel silly now, the Blues and the Grays are two states I live exquisitely in, and for some reason when I read the title I was thrown into Civil War mode and couldn't not see the title as relating to that somehow. that's on me wholly. Had "a Softer Shade of Gray" poem I wrote during one of those occasions. Will see if I can't find it. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
personally didn't pull anything out of the title - The Blues and The Grey until I reached she just breathes in air and smoke.: then I saw the heart of this piece. Enjoyed, my friend . . . j. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Gunslinger, Thank you. The motor is definitely still running. At times that's an infuriating thing. "I know this love will tear me to pieces |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Michael, I wonder if you found the poem you mentioned. Jwesley, Thank you. I appreciate the fact that you were looking for the heart of it and am definitely glad you were able to see it. "I know this love will tear me to pieces |
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