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Isle of the dead
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Isle of the dead |
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Cerulean Member Posts 109 |
"Isle of the dead" A gray isle approaches Shroud in ancient mist, Trees tall and barren Creep upon and flicker, Dissolving courage... You came for something, But your memory falters... Step by step proceeding, Further into the shadows Where darkness dwelt, As a tropical storm looms, threatening the isle... In your hand clasped Is a picture, of someone Lost, unknown to you... Things suddenly emerge, Buildings once renown In bustling days gone, Echoes of a golden age Of a mighty port city, Where jewels sparkled As summer's sun brightly Gleamed upon the sea... Those thoughts fleet In your head constantly, Flashbacks forgotten... Like dreams slowly to be That once were, but hidden Cannot release somehow... Webs cling upon the doors As buildings get closer, Spun in dizzy, quick fashion; Slowly, the memories return... In your eyes, water wells up Yet you know not why... Obstructing your memories Is a stellar flash of light; But the buildings give hope, To unlock memories locked. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Ah, a poem straight from a heart looking at the unfamiliar, but yet he knows he should remember. Still . . . Sometimes it is better to not seek out those hidden memories. Very well penned poem. ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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Cerulean Member Posts 109 |
That's an eloquent description of what this poem could be about. Thanks for your kind words, Jerry. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
"what this poem could be about" Heh.Heh But that isn't what it is about, is it Cerulean, and I'm not to sure it was an "eloquent description." ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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Cerulean Member Posts 109 |
***SPOILERS BELOW*** Jerry- Your first reply (all of it) is correct in most cases. But in the case of this poem the first sentence in your reply is correct and the second may not be. You see, this poem is based on a mixture of my own imagination and Skara Brae from the Ultima video game series. In that example, it would've been better to seek out those hidden memories since the isle of Skara Brae became an isle of the dead due to necromancy. See here: http://wiki.ultimacodex.com/wiki/Skara_Brae And the funny thing is... Skara Brae is also a real historic port village. Look it up sometimes  However, this poem can be read playfully in a number of different contexts without knowing where it's originating from. [This message has been edited by Cerulean (08-02-2017 07:52 PM).] |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Oh boy. I got into Skara Brae as much as I could Cerulean, which isn’t much, because honestly my brain has been through so much sixties acid that I quite often actually have those flashbacks they told us about. In other words, my friend, I’m a lightweight in the brain department and am unable to get into anything except what I conjure up myself. Thanks for pointing me in the right direction, but I failed to "get into it." Sorry buddy. ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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Cerulean Member Posts 109 |
That's perfectly OK. That's why it's better to sometimes not know where a poem is coming from, so you can think in the context that works best for you. Apologies if I have ruined the enjoyment by disclosing too much. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
You haven't ruined anything, buddy, not one thing. ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this read was powerful, and reminded me of someone struggling with MS, or some form of memory loss...don't know if that was your intent... Well done! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this read was powerful, and reminded me of someone struggling with MS, which for me, harbors a lot of memory loss, or some form of memory loss within others...don't know if that was your intent... Well done! |
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Cerulean Member Posts 109 |
LeeJ, that was definitely my intent when I added in the memory loss part (not a part of the game I played long ago, btw). The buildings at the end of the poem can also represent the things that hold our memories. The flash of light blinds you to what you're looking for, and it may take time for the light to reduce in intensity so the memory resurfaces. Such as if you ever have difficulty recalling a word right away but it comes ten seconds later. There are yet other contexts in which these aspects (buildings, flash of light, etc) can be read differently (such as literally instead of figuratively) -- depending on how one likes to interpret them. |
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Cerulean Member Posts 109 |
And the "Well done!" is appreciated.  |
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Poet In Pink Senior Member Posts 1066 MI |
I love the feelings of mystery and adventure throughout ~ With a little splash of Deja vu to spice up the imagination Enjoyed muchers Cerulean Alana |
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Cerulean Member Posts 109 |
Perfectly said. That was one of my goals in writing this poem. Thanks Alana! |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
a great moment of emotion, the verses are just perfect to free some hidden memories and perhaps some fears, don't really know but feelings are high, very "truly" penned yann |
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