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jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

0 posted 2017-07-21 05:45 PM

Both Sides Of My Chin

Rain.
You know - out there
beyond the window,
lightning and thunder
in the dark of the night,

showing me only my reflection
in the window's pane,
a mirror
of the rivulets dripping
from both sides
of my chin.
Rain.
Damned if it does.
Damned if it doesn't
Somehow it always
seems to win,
and drowns me
no matter how well
I swim - and
always . . . always
drops from both sides
of my chin.
Rain.
Unforgivable,
persistent, every time . . .

I think of you.

wesley james beard, jr.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2017-07-21 06:34 PM

Kickass poetry, Jimmy. That rain-splattered windowpane. I have been there for sure. There is nothing quite like staring through the raindrops to make one feel like the loneliness person in the whole wide world.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

2 posted 2017-07-21 07:22 PM

You're killin' me here Jimmy! I love this! Love the title. ~L

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

3 posted 2017-07-22 09:36 PM

Beautifully sad, Jimmy.

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

4 posted 2017-07-26 06:03 AM

heart wrenching, made me sad....
strong write....well done.
felt every word.

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

5 posted 2017-07-26 09:54 AM

Thank you my friends, for taking time to read and comment. Seeing you in my small section of the Blue Pages always warms my soul . . .

j.

Cerulean
Member
Posts 109

6 posted 2017-07-26 03:05 PM

I have no idea whether there is another context behind this poem (because of the "I think of you" part), but to me the poem seemed to have a spirit of humor in it. As far as how rain can have a depressing effect. I enjoyed the read.

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

7 posted 2017-07-26 07:23 PM

I love the way everybody has a different view, or perspective of what something says - that's what makes writing fun.

It never was about 'rain', my friend (from my perspective) it was always about the 'tears'

Thanks for popping in and sharing... nice to see you again, too.

j.

[This message has been edited by jwesley (07-26-2017 08:59 PM).]

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2017-07-26 09:13 PM

nice...james

Cerulean
Member
Posts 109

9 posted 2017-07-26 09:35 PM

I see that I was in error. Now I understand. It's a sad but well written poem. Thanks for sharing.

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

10 posted 2017-07-30 10:00 PM

may be , this is what rain is made for, to think about someone lost for ever, a sad rain indeed but which fertilize the heart
yann

Poet In Pink
Senior Member
Posts 1066
MI

11 posted 2017-08-07 12:10 PM

Raining tears...Very touching write Jimmy ~ Can relate to this one very well ~ Much enjoyed ~ Alana

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