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Open Poetry #50

I Should Have Been

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

0 posted 2017-06-25 01:41 PM

I Should Have

I died
and went to heaven,
and was so shocked
I begged to be dropped
below
but they wouldn't do it,
said I deserved more
than that;
but I left you to die,
at home, alone,
while I went to the store
for a few bottles
of beer.
I left you to die,
alone,
and hell is where
I belong,
with the others
of my kind.

I don't care
how long ago it was,
I don't care
that you were dead
long before I left,
I don't care
if you were in an
unresponsive state of life,
if machines kept you alive,
if your mind was in
some other-where,
if . . . if . . .
I just don't care.

I wasn't there when you died,
and I should have been.
.
.
.

wesley james beard, jr.
Hope this comes across more as a "love" piece, rather than a "sadness" piece, but as long as it works somewhere, I'll take it.

j.

[This message has been edited by jwesley (06-25-2017 08:23 PM).]

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2017-06-25 02:35 PM

It is touching for sure Jimmy. You took on a perspective not commonly thought of. The love is clearly there but there is no overlooking the sadness. ~L

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2017-06-25 02:44 PM

Nice poetry . . . Can sink your teeth into it.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

3 posted 2017-06-25 05:25 PM

some regrets can haunt us, there is "something" deeply poignant in your words
yann

Poet In Pink
Senior Member
Posts 1066
MI

4 posted 2017-06-25 11:02 PM

Hello Jimmy ~ A touching piece my friend...Feels like love and some regret & sadness mixed in ~ Enjoyed reading ~ Alana

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