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Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

0 posted 2017-06-24 10:10 AM

Up and out
before the heat sets in.
I walk the old black top
where the tar filled cracks
look like a Salvador Dali EKG.
The tangerine sun
barely tops the trees,
sending my shadow
a quarter cross the acre.
Roadside trees throw shade
clear to the opposite side
of the field,
to the river.
Old Winston trots along
beside me.
Letting his nose be his guide,
he misses the downwind fox
and frozen rabbit.
But manages to find every calling card
a critter has left by the side of the road.
The birds all gossip
as we go by.
There is always a cool breeze
but not always enough
to keep the gnats away.
They battle for position
under the brim of my baseball cap.
Sometimes Roper,
the village dog,
follows along with us
thrashing and crashing
through overgrown ditches.
We turn around at the cemetery
and head back downhill for home.
My mouth is dry
and my legs are getting tired
so I pick up the pace
to our property line.
A cold bottle of water awaits
in the garage refrigerator.
My reward for a job well done.

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

1 posted 2017-06-24 10:27 AM

a wonderful walk for discovering the country all around, such details are wonders
yann

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

2 posted 2017-06-24 10:50 AM

Thanks Yann! ~L

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2017-06-24 11:43 AM

Heh.Heh Gotta love it, Lori. Walking the old blacktop roads you are sure to meet up with things which "look like a Salvador Dali EKG" more often than not. Great, informative poetry, my friend.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

4 posted 2017-06-24 12:19 PM

Hey Jerry!
As I walk I can't help but want to take y'all with me so you can share the view. As
I focus on finding words while I walk, I forget about my legs. I guess this one does
(being informative)read a little like a road map compared to some of my other works, lol.
~L

Poet In Pink
Senior Member
Posts 1066
MI

5 posted 2017-06-24 08:12 PM

You are a better woman than I am Lori Belle ~ Up and out at 6 a.m.?!!! Ummmm NOOOOO!!!! ha ha Thankies for taking me along on your early morning walk ~ I much enjoyed all the sights and sounds! Alana

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

6 posted 2017-06-24 10:14 PM

Your "tromps" as I call mine, as though I start by walking on air, my feet and legs feel like I'm wearing 10lb ankle weights by the time I get back home - and sometimes I've only made a circuit or two of the yard!!

Anyway, your tromps are very well written mini-ramblings, yet, generally, maintains a specific cohesive thought that causes one to fall down through the piece, line by line until they go . . . "ahhhh" at the end.

Well done, my friend,

j.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

7 posted 2017-06-24 10:33 PM

Walking at six is no big deal Pinkalou when you automatically wake up at five. If I wait any later it gets too hot and I can't walk. I'm glad you enjoyed our little jaunt. ~L

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

8 posted 2017-06-24 10:36 PM

Thanks for the specific commentary on my poem Jimmy. That kind of info is very much appreciated. ~L

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

9 posted 2017-06-25 12:03 PM

A picture is worth a thousand words and vice versa. You have truly out done yourself Lori. Your words are the real deal.

You took me there.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

10 posted 2017-06-25 05:37 AM

Thanks you Blues! Nice to know you came along for the walk. I like to think a person doesn't have to think too hard to understand my poetry. However, I will concede a Salvador Dali EKG may have been a bit of a stretch for some.~L

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