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Still...Amongst The Dead
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Still...Amongst The Dead |
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Bluesy Socrateaser Member Elite
since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417In The Mirror 
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Imprisoned as a captive thought dreams lay in my hopes for tomorrow Morning's fragrance so sweet and clean, remain moist with tears of sorrow Should in passing would we meet, inclining to be gracious, much more each one of us could see how strong our love had made us Without your touching gift for word, my pen lays uninspired Ghostly figures impressed in pulp, tell sadly of spent desires Like scattered leaves in tortured breezes, so my poetry has fled All my memories once so vibrant, lay still now amongst the dead ...just bein' Bluesy |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
ooooh! That was absolutely haunting...Like a tune stuck in your head...the emotion it evokes...you plunge a knife...then twist it. the pain is perfect. ~L |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
wonderful reading, you dare something rare about losses, and life which goes on, until .couldn't we call that despair ? thanks for the poignant poem yann |
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Poet In Pink Senior Member Posts 1066 MI |
Sad but beautifully brushed emotions. It surely touches deeply ~ Much enjoyed ~ Alana |
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Bluesy Socrateaser Member Elite
since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417In The Mirror |
Thank you Miss Lori. I like the way you see my poem. Animated and colorful reply. Thanks again! BTS ...just bein' Bluesy |
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Bluesy Socrateaser Member Elite
since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417In The Mirror |
Your reply tells me you know something of these feelings I express in my poem. Thank you yann for looking deeper. BTS ...just bein' Bluesy |
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Bluesy Socrateaser Member Elite
since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417In The Mirror |
Thanks Miss Alana. I appreciate your reply. ...just bein' Bluesy |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Such dreams, in my experience, have a way of returning, my friend . . . New Seasons and Old Seasons - my dreams tend to be both. j. |
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Bluesy Socrateaser Member Elite
since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417In The Mirror |
Thanks j for your comments and the benefit of your dream experiences. Much obliged. The reality is that it was only a movie. ...just bein' Bluesy |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Bluesy... Wonderful read. Really like your style...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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P.U Stinkenbaum Member Posts 388 No Fan Of Exhaust Fans |
Good read Bluesy. A lamentation of loss that sears the heart. |
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Bluesy Socrateaser Member Elite
since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417In The Mirror |
Thanks for coming by and commenting Paul. Good to see you visiting again. BTS ...just bein' Bluesy |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice flow...james |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This one goes straight to my heart - especially the last verse. I've said many times that I can't write happy - those voices in my head stay silent when the heart is singing. But pain can go deep enough that there aren't any words to do it justice... and death certainly inflicts that pain. Beautiful, thought-provoking write! |
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Bluesy Socrateaser Member Elite
since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417In The Mirror |
Thank you Ruth. I know it's tough after Toe's passing as it also is for dear Margherita, Michael, Seymour, Karen and others. May they all rest well. Regards from Bluesy ...just bein' Bluesy |
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