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A Crowded Sky
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A Crowded Sky |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US 
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A Crowded Sky~ Emotions billow overhead.. Endless Stars nod in compassion, Prayers shove upward at the darkness, Fantasies & Lies Kin with confusion, Burn heavy smoke that Escapes out the chimney With a gasp. First pelts of rain Soak radiant leaves, A grandiose calypso-dance To silhouette a seasons end. There are many endings Beneath this crowded sky.. ©Augustsky [This message has been edited by augustsky (08-25-2020 06:41 PM).] |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
There is a mournful feeling to this. A focus on a season passing. Never thought of how many wayward wishes might linger in the sky, trying to catch up to their intended stars but I bet you are right, I'm sure it's crowded up there. The though of a heavy rain proclaiming a new season would be reason enough to dance in it for me. Michael |
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Starmcneil 1955 Member Posts 174 Alberta, Canada |
So many endings mean also so many beginnings..I love the trip and the hope after the endings...thank you |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Thank you Michael, & yes... doin' a Rain Dance.. Sky~ ~ Cherish Everything ~ |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Some are just meant to be a little sad. Thanks for the read Star Sky~ ~ Cherish Everything ~ |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh, I really enjoyed the pace and visuals in this poem Sky. I loved the nod of the stars and the gasp of the smoke. Beautifully written. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Temptress
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since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I know it's not very productive, but I just get the urge to follow your poems around and sigh at them constantly. I can't break them down into favorite parts because each part is amazing! "How much is real? So much to question |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Sky...Wonderful imagery in this poem. I will be so glad when Fall and Winter gets down South where I live. Thanks for sharing...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Thank you for the read, & dear reply Kit. Sky~ ~ Cherish Everything ~ |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Temptress, You made me grin with that  ,Appreciate your read & kind comments. Sky~ ~ Cherish Everything ~ |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Thank you Paul, yes..it's around the corner here, my flowering crab tree's leaves have turned..& are falling. Sky~ ~ Cherish Everything ~ |
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