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Open Poetry #50

October thoughts

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

0 posted 2019-10-24 04:49 PM

Like banefire on a hillside
these latter days, I flicker
between memory and wish.
Lost, it seems,
to all my after dreams.

Strawberries yield to apples,
but cider's not my drink.

I wonder why I bothered
to climb this pile of rocks;
why I thought the clatter
worth the drop.

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US

1 posted 2019-10-24 09:27 PM

I Like your writing Pilgrimage,
it's unique & strikes a chord.

Sky~

Autumn..
The Golden Hush
Before Winter~

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

2 posted 2019-10-25 10:42 AM

Whether it be cider or the drop, it's the thrill one gets - inside.

enjoyed

j.

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

3 posted 2019-10-25 01:48 PM

Thanks, Sky and j, for looking at this one and commenting. j, you're right, it's the thrill that matters.

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

4 posted 2019-10-26 01:33 PM

Wow...you convey an amazing image with very few words. Very powerful ending. Takes apathy to whole new level.

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