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soul drifter
Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711
Colorado

0 posted 2019-06-18 09:00 PM


The Best Version of Me

Black night
the only eyes that see
can set me alight
lay your gaze down on me
I will be
whatever you wish
the best version of me
the one that you kiss
I've no aspirations
beyond your view
only one destination
to be with you

Blue world
this lonely orbit found me
stuck upon you girl
lay your hands down on me
I will be
here for you to mold
the best version of me
the one that you hold
I’ve no reservations
this time it’s true
only one expectation
to be with you

Fingertips feel this out
my heart swept clean of doubt
oh I feel
oh I feel
so light
I never knew nothing so right
this is who I wanted to be
the absolute best version of me
it’s coming through
baby
you’re already
the very best version of you

Black night
the only eyes that see
can set me alight
lay your gaze down on me
I will be
whatever you wish
the best version of me
the one that you kiss
I've no aspirations
beyond your view
only one destination
I've no reservations
this time it’s true
only one expectation
to be with you
oh I want to be with you

“Outside of a dog a book is man's best friend. Inside of a dog, it's too dark to read”—Groucho Marx

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere
1 posted 2019-06-18 09:31 PM


Deep sigh...oh, that was good...real good. If I had that poem written for me I know the impact would have been profound. Alas,I am left to pretend. ~L
BluesSerenade
Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
2 posted 2019-06-30 01:36 AM


In my minds eye, the best version of you has been uncanny, you come across as a deep thinker,  clear and concise, and the way you wear your heart on your sleeve is refreshing.  I wish you well soul drifter, I’ve always loved reading you in blue.  

Peace

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US
3 posted 2019-07-01 01:57 PM


Souls, Your poetic-lyrics are LIT!..
(think that's the latest version of 'Cool') lol

Enjoyed the read,

Sky

~Don't Quit Your Day Dream~

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