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The Last Violets
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The Last Violets |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US 
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The Last Violets~ He brought her violets, and hugged her legs, the sun shone soft upon his small head. Snatched away.. and the carousel of the dead plays on.. She tucked violets among the carnation spray as it hugged cold bronze, and placed the triangle-fold beneath her coat as it started to rain. He brings her violets, and places one in the silver sweep of her pinned back hair, they share a knowing smile and the scent of one tiny bloom between noses, as she says "they were a much deeper purple back then.. when he picked them, weren't they".. (c)Augustsky |
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kevinjtaylor Member Posts 61 British Columbia, Canada |
Tenderness is not always easy to write without overwhelming the message. You have carried it off. Thank you. |
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kevinjtaylor Member Posts 61 British Columbia, Canada |
Tenderness is not always easy to write without overwhelming the message. You have carried it off. Thank you. |
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kevinjtaylor Member Posts 61 British Columbia, Canada |
Tenderness is not always easy to write without overwhelming the message. You have carried it off. Thank you. |
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kevinjtaylor Member Posts 61 British Columbia, Canada |
Tenderness is not always easy to write without overwhelming the message. You have carried it off. Thank you. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
I love this! The title is perfect. The imagery is heartwarming and heart wrenching. You spoke volumes with a minimum of well chosen words. Thank you for sharing. What a great piece for Veteran's Day. ~L |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I agree with Lori...left me thinking about tomorrow... "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Thank you Kevinj for your kind reply. Sky~ ~Don't Quit Your Day Dream~ |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Thank you L for your generous comments, glad you liked. Sky~ ~Don't Quit Your Day Dream~ |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Nt, Thank you, yes..meant as a special tribute to all the fallen throughout the years. Sky~ ~Don't Quit Your Day Dream~ |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Very nice. JL  |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Pleased you liked JL, Thank you. Sky~ ~Don't Quit Your Day Dream~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Some poems, I will have to admit, that after I have read them and are attempting to say nice things about it, I sometimes stumble among the words I am saying. But sky, some are very much like yours . . . I may stumble here and there, but not because the poem is not up to par, but because it is a deep gracious part of you. This one touched me deeply. ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Awwwww..Dear man..that's the cream of replies, Thank you much Poet ((JP)) Sky~ ~Don't Quit Your Day Dream~ |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
lovely |
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