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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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watching the window from across the room a strange phenomenon is taking place moths flutter and smash into it trying to get to the burning candle on the other side of the window they collide violently into the glass in mindless pursuit of the flame I watch mesmerized at their frenzied craving for the candle's heat in spite of what will be the inevitable fatal burn hate to admit it they are a lot like me back in tha day ©June 1, 2017 / Jerry Pat Bolton ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I can so relate to your words....and btw, beautifully written...enjoy reading you and the transformation that has taken place...I heard Rita Moreno, speaking this morning, about her age, now 80, she says it's the best time of her life....and wishing she had known what she knows now...I feel the very same way...although, I'm not 80, but looking so forward to knowing what an 80 year old should know....thank you for the wonderful inspiration. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you Lee. It seems that ritzy Rita Moreno and I have something in common. I turn eighty next April, and I can say I have never been to a hospital to even stay overnight, never mind spending any and days there. I thank my "real" mother and father whoever they may be for the incredible DNA. I love them for whatever reason. ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ [This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (08-23-2018 07:44 PM).] |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Don't know which I liked better, your poem (which was great) or your comment, especially the DNA part. Equal billing I think. Much enjoyed this - the seriousness and the chuckles . . . j. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Ahhh . . . Many thanks go out to you, Jimmy. You hit the nail on the head about the DNA. I have been truly blessed by my "real" parents. I have led a charmed life concerning my health. Thank you for picking up on it. ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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Poet In Pink Senior Member Posts 1066 MI |
Awesome poem Jerry  Great comparison ~ Always enjoy my visits ~ Alana |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
In my book, to see yourself in nature is a wonderful thing. To see yourself as a man, in the moth possessed, drawn to crash and burn is enlightening. Never forget about the ones that survived the night. ~L |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, Alana, I appreciate you comments more than you know. ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Ahhh . . . Lori, you always come across with a great comment, which this is, but you go further than that, which this poem gave you to look for the survivors. You darn sure did that. ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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