Open Poetry #50 |
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Playing The Game: Depending On The Fast Ratcheting Of A Pawl Lever... |
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Bluesy Socrateaser Member Elite
since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417In The Mirror ![]() |
The lamplight dims casting shadows like fishing nets soon to be pulled in revealing empty catches In the corner, my dogs grumble with only milk-bones on their minds A dream state curiously signaled by a rapid paw movement (RPM) The clock hands continue their rhythmic dance, turning and passing with an occasional caress A silhouetted revolver exquisitely amber-lit by a crystal glass of cognac balanced by a sense of imbalance one in the cylinder... ...just bein' Bluesy |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Ahhh . . . Grim write,Blusey, which is all the more reason I like it. Line after line served the reader the down and out of the unevenness of the brain. ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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Bluesy Socrateaser Member Elite
since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417In The Mirror |
Thanks for reading into my poem so well, Jerry. I appreciate it. ...just bein' Bluesy |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
It is grim alright Bluesy, that "one in the cylinder" stuff got my panties in a worrisome wad. That'd be like me writing about a bottle of pills and a bottle of wine. No Bueno. Tell me you are okay so I don't worry about you getting lead poisoning. ![]() |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Forgot to mention it is a real good poem, your ending pops up out of the blue(sy) and thunks you between the eyes. Your first stanza is just plain cool. ~L ![]() |
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Bluesy Socrateaser Member Elite
since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417In The Mirror |
So many thanks, Miss Lori. Ja, everything's fine & dandy. You can untie your 'unmentionables' now. Hmm. But you did mention them, didn't you? True News Flash FYI: I can't own one of those anymore, and likely never will be able to. ![]() ...just bein' Bluesy |
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