Playing The Game: Depending On The Fast Ratcheting Of A Pawl Lever...

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Open Poetry #50

Playing The Game: Depending On The Fast Ratcheting Of A Pawl Lever...

Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07

Posts 2417
In The Mirror

0 posted 2018-04-16 04:50 PM

The lamplight dims
casting shadows like fishing nets
soon to be pulled in
revealing empty catches

In the corner, my dogs grumble
with only milk-bones on their minds
A dream state curiously signaled
by a rapid paw movement (RPM)

The clock hands
continue their rhythmic dance,
turning and passing
with an occasional caress

A silhouetted revolver
exquisitely amber-lit
by a crystal glass of cognac
balanced by a sense of imbalance

one in the cylinder...

...just bein' Bluesy

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2018-04-16 07:19 PM

Ahhh . . . Grim write,Blusey, which is all the more reason I like it. Line after line served the reader the down and out of the unevenness of the brain.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07

Posts 2417
In The Mirror

2 posted 2018-04-16 10:13 PM

Thanks for reading into my poem so well, Jerry.

I appreciate it.

...just bein' Bluesy

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

3 posted 2018-04-17 04:55 AM

It is grim alright Bluesy, that "one in the cylinder" stuff got my panties in a worrisome wad. That'd be like me writing about a bottle of pills and a bottle of wine. No Bueno. Tell me you are okay so I don't worry about you getting lead poisoning.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

4 posted 2018-04-17 05:02 AM

Forgot to mention it is a real good poem, your ending pops up out of the blue(sy) and thunks you between the eyes. Your first stanza is just plain cool. ~L

Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07

Posts 2417
In The Mirror

5 posted 2018-04-17 12:50 PM

So many thanks, Miss Lori. Ja, everything's fine & dandy. You can untie your 'unmentionables' now.
Hmm. But you did mention them, didn't you?

True News Flash FYI: I can't own one of those anymore, and likely never will be able to.

...just bein' Bluesy

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