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The Trill is Gone
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The Trill is Gone |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere 
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Early evening on the front porch sipping on cold ones while listening to God’s creation trading shifts Before the crickets and cicadas start warming up for the night pigeons and turtle doves croon in alto while song birds whistle, tweet and trill soprano The sun is setting to a symphony of sounds and he says “How quiet it is tonight.” “Can’t you hear the birds?” I ask. “Yes, the pigeons and the doves.” “What about the others?” “What others?” It was then that I discovered that for him the trill was gone as were the tweets, chirps and whistles I knew he had long lost the ability to hear crickets and the near deafening sound of cicadas But the birds… It never occurred to me until then I didn't know when it began but I knew he would never be trilled again |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Heh.Heh Humor personified, Lori. Good to see you still have your warped(?) sense of what is funny. Very good to see that!!! ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Thanks Jerry, it is good to get warped back into shape! Lori  |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
I was enjoying the “cold ones” and melting into the evening sounds, the front porch, then boom! I heard a loud: "WHAT!” and a slap to the forehead and an “oh-brother!” Enjoyed the read, I can see the humor Jerry wrote about, but a bit of sadness in the context. Nice one Lori!! JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. Maranatha! |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Thanks JL for the read..hook, line and sinker! Yes, a hint of sadness, but he can still hear a motorcycle a mile away and tell you if the motor is running right. In the lower ranges he hears better than I do sometimes. Lori |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Oh wow... nice evening on the porch. But yea, hearing loss is no joking matter. I have so been there...almost to the point Of no return...insert cochlear implants. The sounds of nature are music to my ears these days. Not knowing what we've got 'til it's gone it's home in more ways than one. Beautiful poem Lori.. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I found the whole poem intensely sad, given that 'he' can't hear those sounds any more, whether for physical, emotional, mental or spiritual reasons, it is achingly sad for me. Owl |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wow! Superb write in all ways, Lori! If I still judged pieces by "favorite" - this would be my new one of yours for sure. jimmy |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Blues, Owl and Jimmy Your comments are overwhelming. I'm pleased to know my words moved you. Lori |
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Redstart Senior Member
since 2014-05-16
Posts 535 |
As a night owl, I'm often there when they settle down to roost, and still there when the dawn chorus starts up. As such, I find the thought of not being able to here the birds, a tad disturbing. Well written. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Redstart There is some comfort in realizing that you really don't know what you are missing... There is still a world of things to be heard. You probably wouldn't notice if you quit hearing the AC or your refrigerator running or the hum of a ceiling fan. Lori |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
I love every bit of it. As I have also always been a night owl taking, on all the overnight shifts I could. I hear the mocking birds at night and small limbs falling on my roof. The tiny frogs that come out in hordes when it rains and that little hoot owl in another place. I once thought the frogs were ducks out there in the yard , until I went out to look and was greeted with a surprise. So much to learn when you move from north to south. Even the distant sound of a train passing by and the louder roar of trucks and motorcycles on the road. I hear the TV and the humming of the fans and the ever present hum of a different kind that is always in my inner ear or head. I sleep with the radio on just above my head as I am never in a soundless state. I would wake up in a start if all went soundless. Sometimes it might be nice if less noise came through, but maybe I would not really know if I were more comfortable or not. Thanks for the interesting post. Jo |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Lol, you even got a smile out of me with this one, Lori. Glad to see you posting again. I've missed you. Michael |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Jo, thanks for your in depth comment, I appreciate it! |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Michael! So glad to hear I "got cha". Yes, it is good to be back, I missed me too. |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
great summoning of sound to word, Lori~~ ~enjoyed |
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