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secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

0 posted 2014-06-03 03:15 PM

Spring passing silently____
only the raven’s
call echoes through
these ‘endless’ hills

Amid the lovely
Spring twilight
silver moon rising
over ‘endless’ hills

A bat flits above
these willows
on wings tipped
in silver moonlight

A small empty boat
floats time-abeyant
Where does Spring go?

Moonlight dances
with the shadows
and wisps of mist
in this twilight
     meadow

In the mystic Spring
    twilight
even this nameless pond
is a magnificent thing

In the raw violence
of a Summer storm
only men continue
with their petty
     schemes

end of another Spring
too soon all of life
    passing

Three ravens on an oak
      bough
who leads … who follows?!

listening to the moon
I hear the universe singing

Making love in the
    gentle moonlight
all lost in a moment
the dreams of Spring

               --- b. e. adams (6/3/2014)

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

1 posted 2014-06-03 09:01 PM

Dreamy poetry...ain't that just like a dreampoet.

wordancer
Senior Member

since 2000-07-30

Posts 809
VA

2 posted 2014-06-04 10:50 AM

Loved the last stanza, a fitting end to this dream write.

Have you considered consolidating some of the stanzas and fragments, and perhaps not using such short line breaks... feels like (to me) that the short line breaks up the the dreamy flow of words for the reader.

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

3 posted 2014-06-04 02:27 PM

each of these are intended as separate and 'independent' "Zen Snippets" ... not (intentionally) related to each other ...

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

4 posted 2014-06-04 06:25 PM

I like that they are individual and unique ...that is what makes them special...There is so much to love.

wordancer
Senior Member

since 2000-07-30

Posts 809
VA

5 posted 2014-06-05 12:18 PM

Ah-so! mea culpa

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

6 posted 2014-06-05 12:30 PM

Liked the crows spot, but I loved this . . .

quote:
listening to the moon
I hear the universe singing

This will be quoted by people long after you are no longer here.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Redstart
Senior Member

since 2014-05-16

Posts 535

7 posted 2014-06-05 02:29 PM

You write so passionately of the natural world. It seems to absorb you. That's a wonderful place to be absorbed.

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

8 posted 2014-06-05 10:53 PM

... Nature is my sensei/muse/prime inspiration, etc.
I try to give a 'voice' to Gaia and environmental steward-
ship in most of my 'writes!' ...

thanks so much to each of you for
commenting on these Zen snippets.

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