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The Last Man Left
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The Last Man Left |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana 
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sets alone in a room breath comes raggedly door is cracked a tiny bit been that way for three days three days all he can remember not a sound has been heard from behind that sliver of a crack in the door sunlight shines through when the room goes dark the last man left waits for the sliver of light to reappear another third day will be upon him there are no days beyond the third day he hardly moves its as though he is in suspension a time warp locked inside his three days of time measured by thirty-six hours three days it's as though he is on borrowed time inside a borrowed world with unmoving, borrowed eyes with which to sorrow it don’t think he wants to know how the story ends it's as if he understands the world is a lie and three days of lies is all he can withstand he’s like an orphan waiting for a bus with no place to go ©May 27, 2014 / Jerry Pat Bolton ~*~ The poor wish to be rich, the rich wish to be happy, the single wish to be married, and the married wish to be dead. ~*~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Tragic and melancholy my friend.  Lori  |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you Lori, that was what I was looking for. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
Lands like a thud...right in the solar plexis this is good |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you Emma, I loved your comment. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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wordancer Senior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 809VA |
Makes one wonder why: he has three days, where are those 3 days at ... hum, intriguing write. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, Beverly. Since I have written this poem yesterday I have been thinking about it a lot. You brought up some things I have thought about, especially "he has three days, where are those 3 days." I have almost decided to take this poem and expand it into a novel. I think I have enough of an idea where the story would go for me to make it work. Thanks again for helping me stir my creative juices. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Could make an interesting novel. Jerry. Ida |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, Ida, I believe it could just be a very interesting one also. My thoughts are rushing almost too fast for me to get them into note form. I had already had the idea for a story, but after writing this poem, I got to thinking it would fit right in with the story, and after editing it into novel formation it will be Chapter One's kickoff to the story itself. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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