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Open Poetry #49

Tunnel

jjote
Senior Member

since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2016-04-28 12:52 PM

Mirages crowd my dreams.
I travel lost in time
floating in whirling space
free from all dimensions
no boundaries to cross.

My life is mere puff of air
which I can put on hold.
with eyes still closed, I feel
my senses drifting blind
not seeing the tunnel’s end.

False echoes of nothing
reverberate around -
the real world may be
beyond wisps of vapor
closing in upon me.

I have the face of one
looking at the unknown
a forest of dying
sunflowers, growing claws
piercing my dream bubble.

I think it’s much safer
to cuddle my pillow
let the leaves whisper a
lullaby, and the walls
enfold and embrace me.

@jjote 04/28/2016

Ari Squire
Member
Posts 488
In The Phallus Lane

1 posted 2016-04-28 01:00 AM

Each stands on its own as fine and even intriguing poetry jjote. As a whole, I find them seamlessly connected.

More feelings and fewer words please

jjote
Senior Member

since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

2 posted 2016-04-28 08:41 AM

Thanks Ari for dropping by and your encouraging words

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2016-04-28 09:45 AM

Oh my, jjote, that last stanza was/is/forever-will-be the coolest icing on the cake concerning your very well-written trip within your thoughts concerning your midnight tunnel.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

booky1940!
Member

since 2009-04-16

Posts 136
Canada

4 posted 2016-04-28 03:19 PM

"Not seeing the tunnel's end"
Is unpredictable as the future!
A nice write, thanks for sharing!

jjote
Senior Member

since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

5 posted 2016-04-28 04:41 PM

Thanks Jerry & Booky - your comments make it all worthwhile to go on wriitng

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2016-05-02 10:07 PM

very nice...james

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