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ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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New Brunswick Canada

0 posted 2016-03-25 06:46 AM





Autumn leaves cover the lawn
A naked maple's clothes
They rustle in the breeze at dawn
Warning of the coming cold
Just like them our time had come
To drop the romance we'd outgrown

(build)
This ol house became our first care
Painting rooms making repairs
Key's still there under the mat
Near the porch chairs where we sat

Chorus:
But I get like this sometimes
Thinking bout you fills my mind
Your black hair and your red lips
The scent of you when we kissed
Your fancy soaps in the shower
Making love, talking for hours

Kitchen looks so bare at breakfast
Eatin toast makes a lonely crunch
A voiceless time but who'd guess
We'd grow tired of being one
And we tried hard to make the best
Of what was left of our lost love

(build 2)
Last year we vacationed camping
Sang songs by the fire beautifully
But the whole thing left us hanging
Without love, just friends in need

Chorus:
But I get like this sometimes
Thinking bout you fills my mind
Your black hair and your red lips
The scent of you when we kissed
Your fancy soaps in the shower
Making love, talking for hours

Wind chimes ring on the patio
Your image drifts out of sight
Took the long way but now we know
Sometimes lovers aren't for life
Birds in the feeder come and go
And I feel alone but I'm alright

(build 3)
I'll miss all the holidays
But who knew when we started
Years later we would change
And time would find us parted

Chorus:
But I get like this sometimes
Thinking bout you fills my mind
Your black hair and your red lips
The scent of you when we kissed
Your fancy soaps in the shower
Making love, talking for hours

true love never looks after it's own interests

© Copyright 2016 Eric Lewis True - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
1 posted 2016-03-25 07:55 AM


Ah, Eric. This song/poem hits me pretty hard. I am less than a week away from what you wrote about happening to me.

Just pointing out something, hope you don't mind . . .

"Eatin toast makes a lonely crunch" (I think you left out a ") Don't think you meant the word as it is described in the Urban Dictionary . . . http://www.urbandictionary.com/define.php?term=eatin

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
2 posted 2016-03-25 08:26 AM


Jerry, That's very interesting, and you're right, I simply meant eating with singer's no cafe attitude about exact grammer........so drop the "g".......... Lol!
Thanks Jerry much appreciated sorry to hear it might happen to you.

Eric

jjote
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since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada
3 posted 2016-03-26 08:49 AM


romantic blues, reminiscing brings out such moods into your poemSong. ( what's that about the crunch word, was it originally grunch or brunch?)
ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
4 posted 2016-03-27 05:53 AM


Thanks J
Glad you liked the mood setting.
I think it was the word "eatin" in question.

I appreciate the visit and comment.

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

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