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Jack Napes
Member

since 2014-02-22

Posts 290
Phaedra's Womb

0 posted 2014-02-23 01:03 PM

She left me
She always does
I know I'm an easy hit
I thirst for each
and every woman that touches me

In the vainest of ways
I want them all
I can only give of myself
I cannot take for too long

Still, I believe in sanctities
that I cannot uphold
So she left me
She always did

I wanted her to stay,
to make me love her alone
I need that
I really need that

But now she's gone.
A whisper in the back
of my mind as I hold you

You, who give me more
of what I must have.
And I, giving you simply
what you want

So, she left me.
Maybe this time for good.

My heart aches for truth,
devotions, love and emotions
to make me feel whole

But it only knows lusts
that border on madness,
cravings for fulfillment
of the flesh and a caroling
chorus of nymphs to satisfy them

Sharing love and passions
which were birthed in hell

So she left me.
She took her gods and left me

Touch, but don't look

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2014-02-23 01:07 PM

Sounds like a personal problem.

~*~ It's not that the man did not know how to juggle, he just didn't have the balls to do it. ~*~

Jack Napes
Member

since 2014-02-22

Posts 290
Phaedra's Womb

2 posted 2014-02-23 01:42 PM

There and beyond JerryPat2, there and beyond. Thanks for your visit.

Touch, but don't look

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

3 posted 2014-02-23 02:16 PM

It will be interesting as you explore your demons on paper Jack. You are off to a good start!

Lori

Jack Napes
Member

since 2014-02-22

Posts 290
Phaedra's Womb

4 posted 2014-02-23 04:20 PM

Thanks for your replies.

I don't really have personal problems per se. Maybe more than some and less than others, you know. I often write more fictionally that's all. It's difficult at best to really know ourselves since we're not conversing over coffee and rolls at the local diner, though that would be nice. No preconceived ideas, no forgone conclusions.

Touch, but don't look

Walter Poe
Senior Member

since 1999-10-13

Posts 787

5 posted 2014-02-23 06:17 PM

People on here tend to assume that the words are all intended to be actual in all respects as a reference to an aspect of feelings. There are certain mirrors in this poem with who i am what i feel. Life is a expletive deleted aint it.

I aint as good as I once was but I'm as good, once, as I ever was. - Toby Keith

Bluesy Socrateaser
Member Elite

since 2002-11-07

Posts 2417
In The Mirror

6 posted 2014-02-23 06:22 PM

I once thought Captain Video really made it to Pluto! (that's where he said he was...

)

All sillies aside, I admire the intensity in which you wrote. The deep reflections and considerations are striking. It's my belief that if one is capable of simply sitting down and writing something out of their 'bubble', then they are also capable enough to live it, should they muster up the courage and desire to do so.

Well done Jack!

I'd like to read more of this genre, but frankly, your smooth, charismatic delivery is not easily found.

...just bein' Bluesy

[This message has been edited by Bluesy Socrateaser (02-23-2014 07:59 PM).]

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