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The Missing Ingredient
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The Missing Ingredient |
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Cari Member Posts 411 Englnand |
The Missing Ingredient Metaphors like semaphores Are running through my head I’m wasting my time The words don’t rhyme I’ll think I’ll go to bed ~ But I toss and turn and still return Searching for that elusive thing To make the ultimate poem unique To make it flow and sing ~ What I’m looking for I cannot guess Morning dawns without success I’m crunching toast and drinking tea When Mandy climbs upon my knee ~ “Daddy mummy feeds the baby And I really wonder why Cos Judy’s mummy’s feeds it On milk she has to buy” ~ “Well it’s really up to mummy There are two ways she can use From herself or from a bottle It’s up to her to choose” ~ “I think that God is very clever To make babies that cannot chew Cos teeth could bite their mummy’s And that clearly wouldn’t do” Of course the missing ingredient I have for some time sought The ultimate poem must contain A pearl of original thought * * * |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Ahhh . . . This is one hell of a poem, Cari, to say I liked it is a misstatement to be sure . . . but . . . I like it . . . "pearl of original thought" is hard as hell to come up with. ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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Cari Member Posts 411 Englnand |
From the mouths of babes my friend. Thanks for reading; I look forward to your comments on my drivel. |
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jjote Senior Member
since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088Ontario, Canada |
no such thing as original thought, words and ideas are handed down from generations, yet why do we write and read poetry - it's just perhaps one can take these ideas in many different ways, lift them out from wherever they must have come from - from the caves of Eden or the palaces of kings - and that's how the pearls are made..am I making sense? but poetry need not because it's the poet's license one shouldn't tinker with.. |
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Cari Member Posts 411 Englnand |
Oh I know of many who would disagree with you, but let that pass. Thank you for reading. Cari. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Big smile on my face at the end. Gotta love those kids and their perfect innocence. Wonderful when they're young. Rogers and Hammerstein realized the irony of that... "They've got to be taught, before it's too late, to hate all the things their relatives hate, before they are six or seven or eight they've got to be carefully taught" true love never looks after it's own interests |
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