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Open Poetry #49

Seduction of Sleep

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

0 posted 2016-03-03 10:31 AM

The mind binds in a web spun
of delicate drowsy.
Eyelids laden with the weight of
slumber’s kiss;
slowly drooping,
gently dropping,
flutter shutting.
Muscles melting into rubber,
stretching long and yawning
into oblivion.
Deeply breathing in unawareness,
the sweet scent of unconsciousness.
Sounds subside into silent seeds of dreams.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2016-03-03 11:52 AM

You are continuing to come up with very classic poetry, which really gives the reader a sense of being in the feeling of being in the presence of an absolute fine mind . . .

quote:
Sounds subside into silent seeds of dreams

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

2 posted 2016-03-03 12:54 PM

Thanks Jerry! Things have been pretty slow at work and I have been having a terrible time feeling sleepy and trying to stay awake.
I'm always looking for things to do, so I decided to write about it. ~L

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2016-03-03 01:15 PM

And it was certainly a deep, even dark, write. I was quite taken with it, so much so that I was gritting my teeth and saying to myself that I wish I could write like that.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

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