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Cari
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Englnand

0 posted 2016-02-09 07:30 AM










There’s a lake I know where rushes grow

And elder shade that cools the soul

To breathe the air of summer green

Cast a net to catch a dream

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Cut the knots of mundane care

Drop your worries leave them there

Time to spend where nature dressed

And freedoms afternoon has blessed

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Water mirror, sunlit glimmer

Childhood visions shift and shimmer

Sun brown boy in ragged coat

Eager eyes on goose quill float

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Where is this place, please be clear

Must I journey far to find?

Turn left from the path of yesteryear

It lies in the corner of your mind.

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JerryPat2
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1 posted 2016-02-09 07:56 AM


Ahhh . . . Perfecto! What a lovely write,
Cari. The words just slid off my tongue,
and lovely words they were. But beyond the
words was the magic behind them.

"Turn left from the path of yesteryear
It lies in the corner of your mind."

Indeed.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Margherita
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2 posted 2016-02-10 09:53 AM


quote:
There’s a lake I know where rushes grow

And elder shade that cools the soul

To breathe the air of summer green

Cast a net to catch a dream



Wonderful work, Cari! This is MY lake of Zurich ...

Didn't know that "elder" was the name of genus Sambucus, in German "Holunder" (we had one).

Speak to me in these terms and I am instantly on the spot!

Margherita

"Forget every touch or sound that did not teach you how to dance."
(Rumi)

JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
3 posted 2016-02-11 08:58 PM


Enjoyed reading this...james
Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
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So. El Monte, California
4 posted 2016-02-13 07:42 PM


What a beautiful poem Cari. I'm becoming a fan of your poetry.
                                 Ida

ice
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5 posted 2016-02-14 09:10 AM


"These beauteous forms, Through a long absence, have not been to me
As is a landscape to a blind man's eye: But oft, in lonely rooms, and 'mid the din
Of towns and cities, I have owed to them
In hours of weariness, sensations sweet,
Felt in the blood, and felt along the heart;
      And passing even into my purer mind.."

William Wordsworth

You brialliantly compact the words of a bard. ( in no way am I insinuating plagiarism)

"Where is this place, please be clear
Must I journey far to find?
Turn left from the path of yesteryear
It lies in the corner of your mind."

By that, I believe that you have aligned yourself with the great ones, in a more modern form, and sense, of course.

In your poetry I find the expressions of a modern day romantic poet..May romance never die.

Applause!

"Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance."
Carl Sandburg

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6 posted 2016-09-13 01:36 AM


The lake is one of my favorite places, in memory or in real life. Loved this!
Cari
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Englnand
7 posted 2016-09-13 09:59 AM


There is something about a lake at early sunrise which promotes an air of calmness and peace like no other place I know. This is what I tried to express in the poem.
Thank so much for you’re kind remarks, I think you share my feelings also.

Cari.  

2islander2
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by the sea
8 posted 2016-09-14 01:06 AM


hi ari, this is very sensitive, this the kind of place i look for too, i even need, this is a charming poem to wander,

thanks


yann

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