Open Poetry #49 |
Interlude |
Cari Member Posts 411 Englnand |
A flutter of pigeon wings Trip’s the cogs of reflection The smell of Paris Under a September sun From a leftover summer ~ We pause on the Rue Dante Laughing at the cracked bell From the old church of Saint-Severin A ruptured call to morning Matins Discordant in the quarter peal ~ This rose bud of attraction Given so little time to flower We cling to time Clutching togetherness Begrudging the passing hours ~ There was a time As you spoon played your coffee Bright eyes, softened Calling for love I looked away ~ The resting place of the Little Sparrow We lay roses on the black marble Sadness in the crying clouds I take you in my arms And kiss away the tears. Non, je ne regrette rien [This message has been edited by Cari (01-10-2016 07:59 AM).] |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
"No, I regret nothing" Your song is better than that one in my opinion...:-) Something personal in the last stanza-that I don't quite understand..but poetry is like that sometimes, and the form of this poem makes up for any mystery that it holds.. |
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Cari Member Posts 411 Englnand |
Sorry Ice, I don’t know what happened to this the stanzas were jumbled up I’ve done an edit to put it right. The poem concerns a short affair I had with a French girl I met when she helped me out with my French when I was trying to order a meal. Our favourite meeting place was a café where they played the old records of Piaf – The Little Sparrow, and Charles Ternet- La Mer. Our farewell meting was by the grave of Edith Piaf, hope this explains the poem |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
I see...that explains it..good poem anyway, without the explanation..but thank you "Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance." |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Nice thoughts turned into words concerning the passing of an affair and those long dead romantics which embolden it. ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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