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Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

0 posted 2015-11-19 03:18 PM

Thoughts languish on a dead sea.
A mind martyred on a cross of bored.
Eyelids genuflecting at the pew of nada to do,
on a body prostrated in waste of time.
Such are the wholly days of hell I endure.
There is neither redemption nor forgiveness,
only feast days teeming with fragrant toil
to save this stranded soul.

LGR©11/19/15

Constance
Member

since 2001-07-28

Posts 393
Ohio

1 posted 2015-11-19 03:23 PM

Another original and perfectly crafted piece, Lori. If I was the jealous type, I would be positively green!

Smiles,
Constance

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

2 posted 2015-11-19 03:28 PM

Why thank you very much Constance! It has been another slow day and poetry has saved my bacon. ~L

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2015-11-19 03:31 PM

So many cool lines in this short, but poignant piece Lori,
unlike Constance, I'm green with envy. It started with this mind blower . . .

"Thoughts languish on a dead sea.
A mind martyred on a cross of bored."

. . . and got better with each succeeding line.

~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

Ticklefingers
Senior Member
Posts 710
Louisiana

4 posted 2015-11-19 03:55 PM

quote:
"wholly days of hell"

Great word play here Miss Lori!

88's friend

She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast".

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

5 posted 2015-11-19 04:02 PM

Hey Jerry!
I'm really surprised at the enthusiasm of the responses. There was a lot of eyelid genuflecting going on between the lines. Glad I stuck it out. I was about to give up after the 3rd line. ~L

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

6 posted 2015-11-19 04:07 PM

Tf,
I was playing for sure and when it began to feel like work I almost quit-goes to show how bad the boredom has gotten to my attitude- Thanks you all it was most definitely worth it pushing through. ~L

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