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Mr Martini
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Beneath The Line

0 posted 2015-11-15 02:25 AM


Not at all an unfamiliar sound
though I can't quite place the face

I know well the impression
of a heavy step on cobbled walkways

How the heart quickens
in a double-time cadence

I have seen the glistening moonlight
on cold steel instruments

How they cut through the darkest of nights
with surgical precision

Warm and thick the flow has now become
...quietly rewarding

Egyptian cotton pooled and rumpled
an easy breeze wafts over its edge

A stifled whimpering precedes
a brief moment of ecstasy

Then in the deep darkness
darkness grows darker still

Until at last my crimson maiden
you have become my own true love



Here's to you and here's to me and should we ever disagree, here's to me!

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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2015-11-15 05:26 AM


Welcome to Passions in Poetry, Mr. Martini! It seems to me that you fit perfectly as you introduce yourself, living in a "State of inebriation"! And I see you are greatly inspired indeed.

This is a very captivating poem, though there is a core of mystery surfacing in your lines. But in the zone of mystery we can let our fantasy freely interpret your words, which makes it all the more valued.

Margherita

Constance
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since 2001-07-28
Posts 393
Ohio
2 posted 2015-11-15 09:37 AM


I'm so enjoying the melding of Jack the Ripper and It's A Wonderful Life, Mr. Martini!

smiles,
Constance

rainyday
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Heartland USA
3 posted 2015-11-15 06:44 PM


Mr.M, Wickedly wonderful...

rainyday J

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere
4 posted 2015-11-16 12:19 PM


Read you with my 10ft. pole but it didn't help much...Would not care to meet you in a dark alley as you are so chillingly convincing. Against my better judgment I will most likely continue to read your work. However, I choose not to do so right before I go to bed as I cannot sleep with the lights on. ~L
Mr Martini
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Beneath The Line
5 posted 2015-11-16 07:57 PM


Thank you for your welcome Margherita. There was once a Rita in my life. Perhaps there are some that know you by that name.

Constance, I feel you were smiling as much when you wrote your reply as I when reading it. It took me so much by surprise, I nearly swallowed my dentures. I best take a double-shot of Polident the next time I read it.

rainyday, I think I'm going to like you. "Wickedly wonderful" had me salivating so much that I think I'll need a 'triple-shot'.

Dark alleys are where you chance to meet the most interesting people Ms. Lori Rhoden. The worst of us prey in the light of day. Keep working on that pole. It's a dance few can readily do.

Au Revoir

Here's to you and here's to me and should we ever disagree, here's to me!

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