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jjote
Senior Member

since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2015-11-14 08:48 PM

We fold our clothes
piece by piece, pile them
neatly on a chair, as if
with this act, we discard
every part of us that
existed beyond this room.

Your hands become master
of mine. Your touch
caressing with a sense
of urgency, confirming
that with each separation
we lose an eternity.

And now you're gone
only satin sheets on our bed,
their cool soft gloss
luminous in the dark,
remain.

@jjote 11142015

Mr Martini
Member
Posts 366
Beneath The Line

1 posted 2015-11-15 01:20 AM

This effort my dear, while stellar in its content is unfortunately overshadowed by its iconic 1967 title which belongs to Justin Hayward of the Moody Blues. It was released that year in the album "Days of Future Passed". As I recall, this song "Nights In White Satin" was a #1 hit single 5 years later (1972), something few if any others can claim.

Now you know more than you needed. My bad.

Here's to you and here's to me and should we ever disagree, here's to me!

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2015-11-15 09:23 AM

I liked your poem, jjote, very much.

~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

Constance
Member

since 2001-07-28

Posts 393
Ohio

3 posted 2015-11-15 09:29 AM

I know this feeling. You did an excellent job of capturing it here. Nicely done indeed.

smiles,
Constance

rainyday
Member
Posts 304
Heartland USA

4 posted 2015-11-15 06:22 PM

jjote, There is a wonderful intimacey here.
A pleasure to read.

rainyday J

jjote
Senior Member

since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

5 posted 2015-11-15 09:39 PM

thanks Jerry, Constance and RD for your kind comments. Mr. Martini, thanks for the info on the title - this is an old poem way back I don't remember when (just revived it from saved files). I joined a forum where there was a sort of challenge to write about song or book titles, just for fun and to wake up poetic juices. The title must have tickled my fancy (no intent to copycat whatever the real lyrics of the song were - maybe you can tell me here if you have them).

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2015-11-16 08:48 PM

Reminds me of a song and a necklace from long ago...james

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