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A Forelorn & Feathered Four-Poster
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A Forelorn & Feathered Four-Poster |
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Ticklefingers Senior Member Posts 710 Louisiana 
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sprinkled fragments of her love lay strewn upon the floor feather-dusted from the bed the maid will come no more darkwoods lightened from older age and stories long since told a figure lingers at the post the memories leave her cold time has taken what spirit could not her shadows fill the room so soft the breeze that passes now stirring within the gloom She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast". |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Forlorn is the word that comes to mind when I read this. But it is a gentle shadow you cast in this one. Well done TF! ~L |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Sentiments to touch the heart of all who are fortunate enough to read them. Excellent! ~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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Ticklefingers Senior Member Posts 710 Louisiana |
Thank you so much Miss Lori and JerryPat.  88's friends She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast". |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
In that my many 'critics' have said things like I only write "happy/smarmy Romanticism and nature writes that are pseudo-sentimental syrup-dipped tripe" and that I am "addicted to Verse Libre and allergic to rhyme and probably incompetent with traditional poetic forms" ... Perhaps they are right?! ... anyway, I'm always glad to see someone handle rhyme well as is evident in this 'penning!' ... It reminds me in 'tone' of one I did (rhyme-less of course) when liver cancer took my 'significant other' : Lost Love In this empty-midnight room that she has left forever, an old mirror hangs reflecting nothing but moonlight, loss, and eternity. --- b. e. adams jr. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Spirit passing...that's how this makes me feel. Soft and gentle... |
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Ticklefingers Senior Member Posts 710 Louisiana |
quote: Wherever did you find so many critics that would say such things to you SHDP? She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast". |
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Ticklefingers Senior Member Posts 710 Louisiana |
Many thanks for your visit Miss Paula. 88's friend She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast". |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
fine writing...james |
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Ticklefingers Senior Member Posts 710 Louisiana |
Many thanks James. 88's friend She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast". |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Yeah, kinda floats emptiness in the air . . . enjoyed, my friend. j. |
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Ticklefingers Senior Member Posts 710 Louisiana |
Many thanks for you visit Mr. Beard! She told me "play one for your supper Danny and maybe you'll get breakfast". |
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