Richy
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2014-02-09
02:34 PM
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The day is obeying the freedom, to yawn
A river of veins is holding its breath
Slathers of sol, warm the defeated
All of the folds of her drapes, are, completed
Our sigh is beholding, a lake in the sky
The skin of her longing is starting to cry
Afoul of the whether, finally takes plight
A stream of sub consciousness screams, through the night
They swim to the bank and they took out a moan
And spent it with interest from sin they atoned
I hope you forgive all the thoughts, I pretend
The edge of afraid is the meaning of friend
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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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Fair to middlin' of nowhere
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2014-02-09
02:50 PM
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Richy- I adore this! It is a delightful tossed salad of words and meanings. Since you mentioned friend, I was just thinking about a late friend of mine...I might just repost...
Lori
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Richy
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2014-02-09
02:55 PM
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awwww love the food reference..
yes please do i'd love to read it
Thanks Lori G, have a great Sunday
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JerryPat2
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South Louisiana
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2014-02-09
03:05 PM
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Great wordplay here, Richy. I seem to say that often about your poems. Truth is out . . .~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~
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Richy
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2014-02-09
03:49 PM
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thank you Jerry..
words and i are definitely playmates..
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Margherita
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Eternity
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2014-02-09
06:01 PM
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quote: Our sigh is beholding a lake in the sky
The skin of her longing is starting to cry
Dear Richy, I think you are a fantastic companion, your thoughts are dancing steps and the whole performance is just enthralling.
Margherita
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2islander2
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2014-02-10
12:58 PM
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a very loving tribute to sincerity I guess also, all words and images are concerning, thanks a lot
yann
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Kit McCallum
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2014-02-10
10:13 AM
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Lovely cadence Richy, I really enjoyed the flow and form of this. Nicely done.
Best wishes, /Kit
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Richy
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2014-02-10
09:00 PM
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Dear Margy, you know i feel likewise.. and thanks for always leaving such kind and gracious replies.. you're the best
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Richy
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2014-02-10
09:02 PM
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thank you Yann, you always have such positive things to say.. i appreciate it
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Richy
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2014-02-10
09:04 PM
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wow Kit what a wonderful surprise to hear from you, thank you so much i'm really glad you enjoyed it..
best wishes to you as well
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