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Mother Mercy
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Mother Mercy |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali 
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Mercy laughs, on palest wings- sends me soft, to shallow screams. In sleep, I'm panting pain, in paw- of creatures known to fend the Sluagh'.. So dark and shiny, a hindered feign- calls mass of Hungry, from cloud's disdain. Havoc worn, in deadly escapade- I'm heavy-flying, 'midst night's brigade.. Sunshine fades, on wrinkled sheets- I am fodder, to sharp-mouthed feed.. Beasts of sky, roll in my pain- slaking all, in swallowed stains. Wings of watery, static-feast, gorging, on hard-won peace- In loud taste-tests, a sip of me- holding tight, sans the strength.. Pouring gasp, with tip of claw- desperate flounder, embrace the fall.. Torn so tender, from the sky- by foggy forces, on air, in dine.. Head over toes, in full spin- I weep my last, onto the wind.. Last real sight my eyes concur- is the crowd fading, to a blur. A shadow, scattered, shattered- peeled in strips, of all that's mattered.. My turn to drain, in all I've fought- Mother Mercy? Careth not. "..But a tyrant spell has bound me, And I cannot, cannot go.." ~Emily Bronte 'The Night is Darkening Around Me' [This message has been edited by devina (05-26-2015 03:33 PM).] |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Soul crushed for the sifting here, Tanya. You have done wonderfully with this. I.C.U. another little piece falls into place here. Last two stanzas are priceless. Michael |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
*Soul-crushed..that word tastes good here  You must really take credit for throwin' me that line or this pour would never have been. thx darlin' *mwah ~T "..But a tyrant spell has bound me, |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
The last line, the very last line says it all, devine . . . You were wonderful all the way through the poem, but, to me, it was all said in the last line. ~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Sweetest thanx for the read & reply, Jerry! Always great to hear your thoughts! Be well m'friend ~T "..But a tyrant spell has bound me, |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
If you do not have a few books written you should and they should find a name publisher. You are better than most I have read. And do not be discouraged.I just read of a young man who sent his poetry to many named publishers. No one took him on.But he then went on to earn the Pulitzer Award. Best to you, jo [This message has been edited by latearrival (05-26-2015 04:25 PM).] |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
*pulling your words close like a snuggle-blanket You are one of my most favorite people's Jo!! ..the book would be a dream, (ideal!!) ~and? warmest huggs for saying so! *smiling, here snuggled in, with thanks ~d "..But a tyrant spell has bound me, |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
fine writing...james |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I'm in a league way over my head, ~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Sweetest thx James & Jerry! Always obliged fer the readin' be welz ever ~d "..But a tyrant spell has bound me, |
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