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soul drifter
Senior Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 711
Colorado

0 posted 2015-03-14 08:07 AM

I Keep Myself Like Rain

Here's a nickel for the machine
'Layla' is perfect for the pain
there's a torn picture of me
and a crossed out name
oh sometimes I don't even know why I try
these days love never feels the same
and the road maps have bled themselves dry
but me I keep myself like rain
I fall every now and then into the blue of your eyes

There's a sickness in everything
all that I can't ever abide
here's a broken down dream
another hope has died
oh sometimes love wears a see-through disguise
and some days love's a runaway train
tonight a thirsty fang moon will rise
till then I'll keep myself like rain
and fall time and time again for the beauty in your lies

With you and your crucial gaze
and your heart like a purple haze
got your breakdowns all neatly arranged
still you say I'm the one whose deranged
oh baby strange
for you I keep myself like rain
sailing 'round the sea in an upside down umbrella
well well

Another nickel for the machine
'Alison' is a perfect cure
another torn picture of me
the other half is hers
oh sometimes I'm slow to finally realize
these days love is keeping me sane
and the road maps have said their last goodbyes
oh and me I keep myself like rain
I fall every now and then into the blue of your eyes
and time, time and time again for the beauty in your lies

"He turns his money into light to look for her" - U2, 'Lemon'

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

1 posted 2015-03-14 06:27 PM

A masterpiece, soul drifter! Poetry at its very best! I hope this isn't autobiographical, but if it is, LOOK what you did with your pain! You splashed it on canvas for perpetuity for others to imbibe and relate and admire!

Owl

RedStoneEB
Senior Member

since 2003-06-08

Posts 772
uk

2 posted 2015-03-19 12:24 PM

I fall like rain now and again into the blue of your eyes.

perfect great stuff.

Rs

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

3 posted 2015-03-19 06:48 PM

The title of this one pulled me in to read it, and I wasn't disappointed. I like the rhythm and the rhyme is good. It's unforced and compelling, and the images don't take a back seat to the form by any means. I really enjoyed it.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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