Open Poetry #49 |
where is my head ? |
2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Where is my head? In my shoes, I work with On the cold asphalt, Where is my head ? In stars, I go away with them When comes the night, Where is my head? In the eyes of the girls, I wait that they tell me In which country I lost her… |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
And the knowledge the girls impart only makes the pain more unbearable. Liked this one very much, Yann. ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Your last verse packs quite a punch... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
nice...James |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
How many people can ask "in which country I lost her?"? You are a blessed man Yann. Lori |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
thanks blue serenade, you point it with accuracy and gently have a nice day yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
thaks Jerry, better not know sometimes this impart, and live of our own, thanks for the kind comment yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
thanks james |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
hello lori, reading your comment is awesome, have a nice day yann |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Charming little poem, yann. Ida |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Smiling here, dear Yann, As long as you sail among the stars your head is safe, as for the girls ... one never knows! So cute. Enjoyed your humorous vain here. Margherita |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thanks Ida, have a nice day yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
a very sweet comment indeed, so nice reading you margyerita, have a nice day yann |
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Jack Napes Member
since 2014-02-22
Posts 290Phaedra's Womb |
Funny. While reading your delightful poetry, I had the distinct feeling I was thumbing through an old photo album. Touch, but don't look |
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