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She, Selling Sea Shells
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She, Selling Sea Shells |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ Missing those days and the way we never were wading among the rise and fall of some summers' sea. I was she, selling sea shells and so many sand dollars for the taking never-mind the castles washed away. Each storm like a silver torch striking the chimes of some sun day mass painted a new day like a wild fire in my mind put to shame. But the sky held up relentlessly like a black and blue shiner bruising my mood. I was there and it hurt to burn so far down lowering my sails lost in the mist of perverse shadows sending chills among the ripples drifting endlessly in order to heal. But time does not stand still and I don't know if I will be here a year from now being rescued sounds so needy to me. But I often wonder if you wonder or forget to remember my heartache and what it took to turn away and let go. I have walked the silver strand passing through windows a thousand times, taking in the panorama breathing you in catching a glimpse of my reflection held in your gaze so faraway. Oh, how I miss the warmth of my dreams and the gentle breeze of the sea... and making my bed the way I used to. ~*~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
What a mesmerizing, talented look back at the parting of ways. You outdid yourself, Lori, in wonderful expressive thoughts. This was the clincher . . . quote: ~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Yea yea hindsight being 20/20 you know. Thank you very much for stopping by, JP. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
"But I often wonder if you wonder or forget to remember my heartache and what it took to turn away and let go" I think that when something like this happens, more than one person shares in that heartache.. I wonder if it’s the potential to build more castles for all, the coming tides to be, that is most important Sea shells are best when there are both parts to hold in all the life held within them It was great to have you share a part of yourself on these pages again Lori.. Your words read like a lighthouse guiding travelers, through the fog  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you Richy for your wise reply. Very much appreciate you and your warm ways.  |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Now you know, I always enjoyed reading you, and this is no exception - but getting two pieces for the price of one read . . . is awesome. First the one above . . . a beauty all by itself, but, Second, its "inner-soul" ----------- and the way we never were, each storm like a silver torch. I was there and it hurt to burn so far down. But I often wonder if you wonder . . . or forget to remember, passing through windows a thousand times: taking in the panorama, catching a glimpse of my reflection Oh, how I miss the warmth of my dreams and making my bed, the way I used to." ~~~ BluesSerenade Lovely, my friend. j. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
"Missing those days and the way we never were." Sounds about right. Ida |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
sadly sweet and sweetly sad, how we remember the great ones I relate totally, makes me wistful and a bit weepy reading, if only if only..........ahhh......... |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Oh dear, Bluesy Gal, you've brought tears to my eyes. I can so relate to this heart wrenching write so excellently penned - but what a price is paid for the writing of such a good poem. Still, the price has been paid and the memories and the poem are wholly owned. Treasures! Hugs Helen |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
JW~ Thank you for your gracious reply. So nice of you to say so. Ida~ Thank you always. I take comfort in the clarity and closure. Emma~ Your reply is so sweet. Thank you for getting it. Aaaah is right!! Helen honey~ yea why is it that decent poetry is inspired by heartache. What a concept huh. Thank you for reading and leaving your kind reply. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
fine writing...James |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
But the sky held up relentlessly like a black and blue shiner bruising my mood. - LOVE this.. all of it. So good to read you.. |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
this is so emotive, like a part of us, torn away, like a love memory, like the time which pass, thanks for the graceful write and the deep of the feelings have a nice day yann |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Wonderful writing! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Mahalo James~ Karou~ I am so pleased to see you here. Thanks so much. Yann~ Thank you for your sincere reply, I really appreciate it. icebox~ Makes me happy that you read me. Thank you, Sir. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
wow...lovely, lovely write. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Hey thanks Ericc. Nice to see you around these parts aggain.  |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Beautifully rendered piece here. The memory seems distant, the ache not so much. I truly enjoyed this one. Well done. Michael |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I feel honored by your nice reply. Thank you, Michael. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I often hoped you would come back and I am so glad you did and what a poetic comeback this is! Totally awesome. It is captivating at a deep level really. You have used wonderful imagery too. And now be like the ocean, keep the memories in your depth, but on the surface enjoy the touch of today's sun and breathe in the possibilities of now. Love, Margherita |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You are such a love...thank you dear heart for your beautiful reply. Your spirit is such a gift and always brings a sense of peace to my life. Many blessings to you Margherita. |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Wow! Best thing I've read in a good while. "Missing those days and the way we never were" Something I really love about that. I always miss the way we never were... Hindsight is a pain in the tail but now somehow beautiful thanks to you and your poem. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Wow, I was surprised how inspiring this piece read and easily I could relate. Even felt the stir of near forgotten emotion... Nicely penned |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Soul drifter and Rex, Thank you both for looking and for your kind replies. Very much appreciated~ |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Lori, I was looking for a poem of yours to ask you to please email me from the button in any of my poems. You don't have one and I just would like to explain something briefly to you (nothing bad, lol!) - and I happened upon this exquisite poem, immersed in beauty, poignancy and memories . . . very,very beautiful. Please will you email me - no rush. Owl |
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amk377 Member
since 2009-08-11
Posts 58South Carolina |
Hi. It's Aimster. Been a long time! Your words are just as beautiful as I remember them...this poem made me feel so many emotions at once. Simply amazing!! Amy "If you can dream it, you can achieve it" |
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Redstart Senior Member
since 2014-05-16
Posts 535 |
'Missing those days and the way they never were' Poignant opening lines that infiltrate the heart of the poem. looking back, those dreams and might-have-beens can haunt us all, but letting go, even in heartache, is very often the right thing. It's not easy. A very personal and emotive poem, written with grand style. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
BluesSerenade, Another one I let slip by.I read it way back when you posted it and was just in a time frame where I could not answer you.Just know I look forward to your poems and thoughts and am so happy you are back. This one has to stay at the top of the page for a while. Love to you jo |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
me too. Love this~*~ |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"But time does not stand still and I don't know if I will be here a year from now being rescued sounds so needy to me. But I often wonder if you wonder or forget to remember my heartache and what it took to turn away and let go." Wow,wow,WOW!! You just squeezed the heck out of my heart! This is a very special writing, but this verse is worth it's weight in gold, sea shells, starfish, and seahorses... Not to mention sand castles. Beautiful, my friend. JL Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you so much everyone. I appreciate all your nice replies. Seems my muse is on vacation. Hugs to you all. Xo |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori….I reach out my hand to touch your lovely words and the torrent of emotion lets me see your feelings sliding into the sand from the sea. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you Martie for your sweet reply. I miss you and your poetry.  |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Bluesy, Reading your poem once again, I noticed I hadn't written a comment--probably because I was so blown away with the grace in which it was written that I could not find adequate words in which to respond. Lovely, lovely writing! miscellanea |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Riding along on the memories will take you a long way. I know I have many.great poetry. Enjoyed, Jo |
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Gale Senior Member
since 2013-06-10
Posts 578Russia |
Thank you for sharing your beautiful poem! Love these lines: "never-mind the castles washed away" !!! |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
So many good lines in one writing....very, very impressive, miss.  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Misc...Thank you for your nice reply...it makes me feel understood. Sometimes we gotta do what is in our best interest however painful it is. so happy you are here. Jo...your support and kind words bring great comfort to these blue pages. Thank you always. Gale...much appreciate your reply. Thanks so much for reading. Deer...i know it sounds cliche but I am deeply humbled to know you were here and took the time to read me. Knock my sox off already!!! Thank you sincerely. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
This 'write' is REALLY superb! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you DP. much appreciated. |
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