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Come to Me
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Come to Me |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
"Come to me" she whispered, on the wings of yesteryear. "Come to me" it echoed through his heart. She shimmered there, beckoning to the memories he had locked away for safe keeping. He moved toward her, his feet a mind of their own. Without thought or conscience movement, he reached for her, His hand; cold, callused from toil, moved toward her cheek The soft skin, like silk to his memory; drove him on to touch what he knew he could not have. Yearning; for the warmth, that once lived in those eyes. "Come to me" she whispered as his hand passed through nothing As a shiver moved from his fingers to the very soul of the man. Falling to his knees, eyes to the floor he reached for the whisp of her feet; blindly, hoping Knowing the truth of what he had done. "Forgive me" he whispers into the stillness of the air. She smiles down on to him, eyes empty nothing more then a ghost of what she once was. "Come to me" she whispers When you are old and grey and full of sleep, |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Such subtly within the lines of this poem, Marilyn. The haunting "Come to me" takes the reader (moi) into a sense of intrigue no matter where the voice is originating from. Good. Very good. ~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
enjoyed...james |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is intriguing. It looks like she has forgiven him something and calls out to him to let him know, from a place where there is peace of mind. Margherita "Love is the One who masters all things; |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
i think like Margherita, it is intriguing, something like amertume, or a possible rebenge from love, the lines are however very concerned by love, loved it yann |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
enjoyed this very much, loved the imagery & intrigue produced. xx Love is the life of the soul... |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Excellent writing Enjoyed. Jo |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Intriguing to say the least, leaving one to ponder what is is he has done . . . well done... enjoyed j. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Wonderful to see you and read you again, Marilyn. All is well here...welcome back! |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Stark and haunting... exceptionally done Marilyn. Good to see you btw  Michael |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
A mystery poem much enjoyed. Maybe it's the person she once was that's calling to him. She wants to be that person again but cannot be because of what he's done in this reality -but in that place beyond here she still loves and calls him. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Thank you all for your wonderful comments. It is awesome to see you again Micheal and of course my favorite Deer ever ;-) |
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