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Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

0 posted 2014-01-29 09:48 PM

photo 67465f8e8e2faa4938eaa36b8fbe830a_zps127d1bc2.jpg

Your gaze is the roof
that lends
me safety

Your being is
the breath,
I borrow

You
are the harbinger
of
my smile

You are the coming
of,
my morrow

My words are just
an outline
of
the curves,
that grip you
firm

They also are, the maker
of
the naked
truth
we yearn

Meander soft
upon
my thought
and there
I hope, you stay

Your eyes are ideals
that bleed
belief
into a sky,
of gray

You were written
in a weave
of wind
from words no one
can spell

Take my hand
and come inside
and in my heart
do dwell

katahdin
Senior Member

since 2010-07-01

Posts 1196
ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.

1 posted 2014-01-30 02:18 AM

Lovely poem and picture, enjoyed!
Kat >^..^<

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2014-01-30 10:36 AM

I love the outline of the curves!!
Very cool...very beautiful....all of it.

Beep beep an' beep beep yea!!!

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2014-01-30 11:47 AM

Oh boy. Yes! Absolutely love this . . .

quote:
You were written
in a weave
of wind
from words no one
can spell

You have a very definite great way with words.

~*~ If they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

4 posted 2014-01-30 07:38 PM

The same stanza that grabbed Jerry Pat, grabbed me as well.
Liked it all save "do" in the final line. I don't know why it was unsettling. Can't explain it, other than my mind's ear, because I did not read it aloud.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

5 posted 2014-01-30 08:51 PM

thank you Kat as always you are the kindest

I'm glad you liked it Lori thanks for leaving the wonderful reply.. the beep beep part reminds me of a Beatles song

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

6 posted 2014-01-30 08:56 PM

thank you Jerry i really appreciate that..

VAS i think sometimes maybe our line breaks chop it up differently and even get in the way of the flow.. thanks so much for your time that was very kind of you

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

7 posted 2014-01-31 08:51 AM

Absolutely delightful write, dear Richy! I must say that in the last stanza, that "do" sounds just perfect to my ear, it adds to the harmonic sound of it and it stresses the wish, as imperative.

Whoever has inspired you to write this must be thanked, for this is quite special.

Margherita

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

8 posted 2014-01-31 09:34 PM

thank yourself Margy and all the other writers ive met over the years that have inspired my scibblin..

thank you honey do.. you always bring a big smile to my face

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

9 posted 2014-02-05 08:35 AM

This is really sweet Richy. It has a special warmth about it. I love the pic too!
Thank you for sharing.

Lori

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