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Open Poetry #49

We Were As One

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2014-11-11 06:33 PM

I knew how to hold her
couldn't be better
there was a full moon
I was consumed by her
joie de vivre
we quietly looked into
each others eyes
so enraptured
we were amid the stars so bright
colorful and exciting
we were the rotation . . . the heaven's glow
of course
all of this is unnoticed
for we are as one
inside a simple cocoon of ours
we are radiant and like ripe pearls
claimed within our furtive, secret covering
we were a single heart
amidst love's ocean of intensity
ahhh . . .
sometimes I just hold her tenderly
within the understood periphery of friendship
but there were times
giving way to the vulnerable power of love
I removed her bothersome clothes

©November 11, 2014 / Jerry Pat Bolton

If they give you ruled paper write sideways.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2014-11-12 06:13 AM

You still do that last line kicker like nobody's business and love looks good on you!

Lori

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2014-11-12 08:01 AM

Thank you Lori.

If they give you ruled paper write sideways.

Redstart
Senior Member

since 2014-05-16

Posts 535

3 posted 2014-11-12 02:28 PM

Gotta agree with Lori, you have mastered that last-line twist. But, it detracts not one iota from the passion of your poem.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2014-11-12 03:25 PM

Thank you Redstart, I appreciate your kind remarks.

If they give you ruled paper write sideways.

EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

5 posted 2014-11-15 08:14 AM

I also liked the passionate poet in the One heart, one love and the sly ending of the hound dog

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

6 posted 2014-11-15 08:41 AM

Heh.Heh Old hound dogs need love too, Emma, but you know that. Thank you.

If they give you ruled paper write sideways.

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