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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ Burning tears slide sideways while I dream in watercolors rewinding an impossible love affair lying in wait deep in the dark abyss of the iris in my eyes. I blink you back if only for a fleeting moment waving at every go round that leaps from the past pushing pause. Winters were cool on the outside and the warmth of your kiss was a welcome shiver. The spring was long stemmed in a field of flowers while making dandelion wishes that blew in the wind. Summers were for low tides and wading in warm pools. The fall was for skipping stones across shallow waters thrilled by the ebb and flow. Somehow, by sheer will I kept my head above water. I was not so blinded by the light or slap of wind or the sudden rush of lust leaving me to take the fall. Our impossible love affair would be the keeper of my dreams a gift to take with me wherever I go into the future past,and beyond it was all that. My eyes have since adjusted to the light slow dancing in the shadows rising high above the fog bank softly swirling in the evening mist cradled in the crescent. Those days were the times of my life Old man winter collides from all sides; spring makes me feel brand new again the fall is for leaving and the summer soltice lingers longingly. You were my impending storm my spring bouquet my cool blue water. the rustle of my leaving. You were the catcher of my breath. Even now, when the breeze ruffles my hemline I am lost in your smile still. ~*~ revised...remembering when |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Dancing around the memories of times past, and your memories were still fresh as the moments they were made, it seems. "Impossible love affair," oh, aren't they all?These memories, we look back and wonder where they are, and do they ever think of us. If they give you ruled paper write sideways. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you for your nice reply JP...and for reading my poem the way it was intended. Yea I wonder if he remembers me. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Oops |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
We all wonder Blues . . . If they give you ruled paper write sideways. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Memories bring back many pleasant times and replenish us when needed.Enjoyed your poem, jo |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you sweet Jo.  |
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EmmaRose Senior Member
since 2011-03-02
Posts 1376Midwest |
When each season can wrap round you, heart and soul, with its own unique blend of artistry, you have lived and loved - beautiful sentiments in your poem |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
As I read, my thoughts: Oh, I love that line, I'm going to highlight it; then another gripped the same and a new phrase, likewise. There are a few cliche phrases, but they are wrapped in so unique ones, they almost disappear from notice. I was totally captivated all the way through from the "tears" that created "rainbows," in your view. I need to save this one and share it with friends so they can see a wonderfully written poem to which I might aspire. Your permission?????I have lumps in my throat from the beauty within this piece. A second look, it was "tears sliding sideways," "dream in watercolors," not tears creating rainbows, but that's what I saw. Your words are better, more original, yet evoking what I could relate. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, I'll seek the lighthouse evermore. |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
As one who spends much of the present thinking about the glory of the past, this sings to me. "You were my impending storm" Great line. Every girl I've ever loved were storms in my life, cleaning the slate and leaving a rainbow behind afterward. Anyway, Blues, this is a great, great write and it is sure to resound in my head for a good long while. Great stuff! Saving this. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Oh, Bluesy Gal, this is wonderful! Sadly I can relate (I suppose most of us can) but I certainly couldn't write it as well as you have done. I often wonder too if "he" remembers but somehow I doubt it. Men are different to women in that respect. I will read your great poem again (probably again and again) but not now - am left feeling somewhat "raw". Whew! You write a mean poem (with "mean" meaning fantastic) and I would have to read it now just before going to bed. Damn! Hope I don't dream! Hugs to you dear one. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Emma- that is so nice of you to say. Thank you good poetess. VAS- I so appreciate your kind reply. I often feel my poems are too intense. I can't help myself. Thanks again for being so gracious with your comments. soul drifter- You know I'm your biggest fan so knowing You were here makes me very happy. Thank you tons. honey- I always love hearing from you...it's Like visiting with an old neighbor. Thank you always for your support and All the kindness you share. Xo |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
grand-fine imagery and Romanticism ! well 'penned' indeed ! |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Very nice romantic poem, Blues. Enjoyed. ida |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
"Even now, when the breeze ruffles my hemline I am lost in your smile still." Oh, hell - and the wind blows here often. xx |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thanks much dreampoet. Ida - always nice to see your name here. Thanks for reading me Honey girl xo  |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
That was exquisite! A metaphoric Mecca! It was a full length Oscar winning romance. A vicarious and voyeuristic voyage dipped in pure chocolate and yet, elegantly understated. I'm at a loss for words... Lori  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Lori...that is the nicest reply. Thank you very much. Honestly, I am so touched by your comments. Thank you sweet lady.  |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Ah, so nostalgic, and, from the youthful soul with which we all start (no matter how old that soul might be in reality), the yearnings for that one love that is always irreplaceable no matter how many loves may follow it, and the brightness your soul exhibits with the memory – is just wonderful, Blues. This post was so soft in it's essence and shows the depth of love/feelings/soulfulness that you harbor inside. A new high for you, in my eyes, my friend, for truly letting your spirit fly. I feel . . . your gentleness with this read, and it is a beautiful thing indeed. jimmy |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you very much kind sir. Your reply warms my heart. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Oh my gosh I hadn't stopped by in about a year.. every now and then something pulls me back here for visit.. Oh Bluesy its so nice to read you again and know you still adorn this earth with all that is you.. as always this is one of the more beautiful things I've ever read.. just as enchanting as your lovely picture.. i hope all is well dear friend |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
glad to see this grand-fine 'write' brought back at the top of the "P.I.P.-land" by the cyber-sea queue ! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I miss you when you're gone, Richy. Thank you for looking me up and for all the nice things you said. Dreampoet- much appreciate the visit. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I love the way you have woven the seasons and what they represent to you into this. The change from beginning to end is palpable, and yet your grateful acceptance of something others might only find pain in is enviable. great writing. Michael |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
oh so beautiful, what amazing images abound in this. xx Love is the life of the soul... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
enjoyed...james |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
What an exceptionally intense and beautiful write, dear Lori! A real deep pleasure to read and absorb it. Ahh, those impossible love stories haunt us still. I love every single word of this. Love, Margherita |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Michael- thank you for leaving such a nice reply and for reading beyond the written words. Tracie - thank you so much for reading my poem and taking the time to reply. Very much appreciated. James- I'm always happy to see you here. So glad to see you posting again. Margherita- your kindness and insight always warms my heart. You are such a special lady. Thank you. |
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