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JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2014-10-01 08:23 AM

Say what!!!
I read this earlier then my computer froze in the middle of typing my reply.

black crow dominating
the untethered bayou of mystery
it rose high in the sky
twain heaven and Bayou Lafourche
catching spirits' sighs
the Eternal One
watched and held His breath
timeless trysts beneath cypress trees
as innovative as
angels indulgent smiles
these spiritual and physically bonded
lover
the crow dipped and dived
toward special places
a silent prayer on its wings
seeing things a human cannot
in the lovers' silhouetted lashes
which devastated
their special attachment
there were harsh words of sentencing
you're not of the same race
still, within the shadow of the trees
they gave to each other
what they had to give
themselves
then one horrific night
a night no will talk about
they came for the lovers at midnight
took them to a place
where they built a huge bonfire
the crow
gracefully and quietly
glided to a spot
where the spirits of the lovers
were set free by flames and screams
where the grass will never grow again. .

[This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (10-02-2014 05:37 AM).]

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

1 posted 2014-10-01 11:39 PM

Say what!!!
I read this earlier then my computer froze in the middle of typing my reply.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2014-10-02 05:40 AM

Thank you Blues, everything is redone now.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2014-10-02 10:05 AM

This is dark and very well done...yanno JP this place isn't what it used to be...not that many people stop by anymore...and some of the people who are here aren't really here...so you gotta stop roughing yourself up so much. be happy with what you write... and don't fret so much.

I don't do facebook..i don't wanna do Facebook and I enjoy reading poetry...so i like coming here. But change is part of life..we better accept it cuz fighting it is going to be a losing battle. Glad you put this up again.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

4 posted 2014-10-02 11:19 AM

There are some fact of life that are hard for me to accept, this being one of them. Good write on a horrific subject.

Lori

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

5 posted 2014-10-02 11:53 AM

Glad you stopped back by, Blues, and thank you for you meaningful thoughts.

If they give you ruled paper write sideways.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

6 posted 2014-10-02 11:54 AM

Oh, I understand Lori, there are things which are hard to bear, but closing your eyes to the evils of this world is not the answer. I appreciate your sensitivity.

If they give you ruled paper write sideways.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

7 posted 2014-10-02 06:24 PM

All I will say is that you do "dark" extremely well, dear Jerry. This is haunting.

Margherita

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

8 posted 2014-10-02 06:30 PM

Love it - especially after they "came at midnight . . . "

Cool write, my friend!.

j.

and Blues ... total agree about facebook ... only one in my family ostracized because I won't use it!!

j.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

9 posted 2014-10-02 06:35 PM

Thank you, Margherita, I so appreciate your thoughts concerning my poem.

If they give you ruled paper write sideways.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

10 posted 2014-10-02 06:37 PM

Thanks Jimmy. Blues and Jimmy? I've been on Facebook for years, I'm still the same old me.

If they give you ruled paper write sideways.

Gale
Senior Member

since 2013-06-10

Posts 578
Russia

11 posted 2014-10-02 07:13 PM

Terrific!
Well written, Jerry!

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

12 posted 2014-10-02 07:15 PM

Thanks Gale, thanks for stopping by,

If they give you ruled paper write sideways.

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