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Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2014-01-24 10:48 AM

I loved you before
you were a part of the ocean,
before you learned to swim.

I loved you before you held my finger
in the palm of your hands,
and I'll love you long after you let go.

I loved you before the invention of fire,
and I'll love you when it all burns out.

I loved you before I was born,
and I'll love you long after I die..
I'll kiss you when you take your last breath,
I'll hold you so that you'll never forget.

I'll love you
when all the rivers turn dry,
when the sun engulfs the Earth,
when it all subsides.

When the ashes spread
and are adrift
spaced across the universe,
and all that's left
is one human tear,
floating through space

one of the many
I shed when you were born.

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

1 posted 2014-01-24 10:59 AM

I loved you before the invention of fire,

stupendous line indeed, because love is fire too, what a creative verse like other beautiful images of the poem, you are really in love for sure and we can read it gracefully,

thanks a lot

yann

EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

2 posted 2014-01-24 11:12 AM

beautiful, the universe speaks its greatest
triumph and glory through love of your child perhaps? or whomever you speak of

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2014-01-24 05:00 PM

Oh how beautiful this is, so deep and true this love you write.

Really nice to see you her, kaoru.

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

4 posted 2014-01-24 10:15 PM

what more love is there then the birth of life that we get to be a part of..

what an amazing piece, that just glows in sincerity

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2014-01-25 08:44 PM

fine writing...James

Gale
Senior Member

since 2013-06-10

Posts 578
Russia

6 posted 2014-01-25 08:59 PM

I agree with others, it's so beautifully written.
Much enjoyed reading!

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

7 posted 2014-01-26 10:42 AM

Dear Kaoru, this not only tugs at my heartstrings for its very touching content, but it also has my admiration for the wonderful poetic flow and imagery.

Brava!

Love,
Margherita

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

8 posted 2014-01-26 12:32 PM

Kaoru, how is that little miracle anyway? I often think of you and your daughter. Nice poem to keep in her memory box mama

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

9 posted 2014-01-31 12:05 PM

She's going to be 10 this year!

Thank you all for your lovely replies.

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