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Between the words
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Between the words |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
There was a space between the two words It was a gasp and a small bite of the lower lip It was a breath heavy with heavenly implication It was a look in her eyes the tilt of her neck The space was enough for a dream The conjuring of a fantasy A dance of wills A sparkle in the eye She holds me In the space between the words I am lost I aint as good as I once was but I'm as good, once, as I ever was. - Toby Keith |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
YES!! I love this! you captured my curiosity with the title, then took me where I wasn't expecting and kept me hanging on for the end and it was brilliant! Lori  |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Emptiness is profound in this one. Very good writing. ~*~ When they give you ruled paper write sideways. ~*~ |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Excellent,I could see the face,the look. Jo |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Ooh, I really liked this one, Walter. The murderous anticipation of being held right on the cusp. Enjoyed. Michael |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
OH WalterPoe~*~*~ That is some lovely, lovely stuff...have to admit...my breath caught on it~*~ ~niiiice ~write on~*~ |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Excellent poem...the whole idea holds so much promise and leaves so much to the imagination. Yes yes yes... There is much to be said between the words. Loved the feeling and emotion your poem conveys. |
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