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The Key
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The Key |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa 
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THE KEY I am glad that my my heart is being hacked into rough-edged scraps and that those frazzled remnants are being stretched and squished in a mangle for at last I can turn and struggle away against a wild, wild gale that encrusts each bleeding shape with jagged ice-spikes pressing into my gasping lungs as I grapple for the freedom and solitude I so adore and hate. Owl |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Diana…. "as I grapple for the freedom and solitude I so adore and hate" I understand what I quoted above…yes..but the rest scares me. I hope you are ok. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
This was wonderful, my friend, another of "my favorites" of yours. j. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Martie. Yes, I am OK, . . . or getting there. I am almost always OK. Like Diana Ross, I will survive (this)! But thanks for your concern. Owl |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Jimmy. Yes, the key is to use pain of whatever kind, to climb back up on the back of, to a place of safety. Owl |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
fine ending in particular! I can easily relate to the love/hate relationship with 'freedom & solitude;' however, I have also had a similar ambivalence toward 'poetry' ... never sure whether being 'compelled to write it' is a blessing or a curse?! |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
When I read your poetry, I am immersed in the emotion that wraps around your words. Sometimes, I have nothing to say because I am still too busy feeling what you so beautifully express. xoxo A |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Bruce. Owl |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Alison. Yet that 'nothing' is everything because you have your own wonderful, inimitable way of saying it as only Alison can. Hugs Wol |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"as I grapple for the freedom and solitude I so adore and hate." You always dazzle and amaze with such deep perception and so few words. Enjoyed, my friend. JL  Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you for your kind words, JL. Just what I needed, lol. Owl |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Amazing poem,Diana. Hope things get better soon. Love, Ida. |
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Redstart Senior Member
since 2014-05-16
Posts 535 |
Deep and engulfing to the reader. I know that poetic form has a name, but I'm not going to google it. It was just perfect without such crass interference. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Ida. So do I. Love Owl |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Redstart. I used to teach English which included poetic forms, but I toss my nose at all of that now, and in any case, I have always written as it pours out of me, with no conscious regard for form or technicalities (though I know they help in the background). I have no idea what form this would be, and like you, I really don't give two hoots. Thank you for understanding so well. Smiles. Owl |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Like others before me, I'm particularly drawn to the last 4 lines - I think we've all experienced such a dichotomy... you just expressed it brilliantly! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Ruth, for your kind words. Yes, a dilemma of sorts. Owl |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The ying and yang of life is well expressed in this, Diana. Good to read you... and as for keys... I've written of a few of them myself. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Karilea. Owl |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Diana, This poem speaks to me. It says, "You understand, don't you?" And I answer, "I understand every word." Beautifully done, my friend. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Kate. Owl |
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Gale Senior Member
since 2013-06-10
Posts 578Russia |
Diana, I told you that I love this poem Stunning! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Galina, for your kind words. Owl |
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Damien Page Junior Member
since 2014-03-30
Posts 22 |
I felt this. You do a very impressive job of expressing very vast and enormous amounts of pain in a few words. Thank you for sharing this. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Damien, for, as always, your beautiful and compassionate response. Owl |
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luminosity Senior Member
since 2005-11-18
Posts 813 |
yes...as someone above said...your work is always painted with emotion...though as void as I feel of late, its a wonder I even recognize it great write! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you, Luminosity. I am sorry you are void of emotion - and I wish I was. Owl |
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