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sugar coated lingers |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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there are those trees along the side of cliffs...those limbs you can perch upon and look down at tomorrow as it were safe to step wide legged then and savor the free-fall falling onto impaling momentary: I would offer you just a moment of fragile between the intensity of my mind like foreplay before ravishing I would touch you with my eyes you would be the gentle tree with breezes moving your caution around ruthless but the underside of your nervous then would shudder like stones being aroused there would be the sounds between love and those other things you get on you when your hands reach down into heaven and punish the hell out of your proper modesty then you lick the salt from sugar coated fingers ______________ daark |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: After reading the introducing lines I was in ecstatic free-fall catching my breath ... just in time to stop and land safely upon the flying carpet woven with your most colorful heights-oriented words ... This is deep while it soars. Margherita  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms Mar...thank you lady friend |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Once past the fear of being up that high, then falling seems almost natural. Oh what I would give for a set of wings, instead of feeling wrapped up and trapped in the roots and mud and loam. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms Moppet...I have some wax wings that were only used once if you want them? |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice reading...James |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You and Tom Petty have been hanging out again. Free Falling.... When those stones get aroused then one never knows what's going to happen. Stimulating great visuals as usual DS. Eric true love never looks after it's own interests |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
This appeals to all of the senses, D.S. Sight, sound. taste , touch...it's all there. But I don't know what "proper modesty" is? enjoyed |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
James, thank you ____ ET, thanks amigo ____ Iceman..it is always "improper" grin. Thanks guy |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
There are so many sighs in this... but the best of course is the eye touch, because that can be given any time any where any age... so that line makes this a  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Sweetsun, thanks for the glances and keeps |
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Startime1955 Senior Member
since 2012-04-22
Posts 1072Alberta, Canada |
This poem leaves me confused with myself...I don't know if I should run away or go for a closer look...Well written |
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dreamgal Member
since 2011-03-17
Posts 442 |
Simply... Loved this! Thank you! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Starfriend..thank you for stepping this close ___ Dreamgal, thanks lady friend |
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