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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
What more is there in this to this than this Work work can't get hurt momentary moments of loneliness before sleep deep $ave $ave days gone by of raves a pause to one who draws where one comes under inspection where she is on this day of sun with her son and a biological clock life under the gun another meeting sipping tea by seating another interview potential mate declaration of inclinations and pondered query of directness how much money do I make stability reliability and history. How much more can I take Chemistry overlooked slightly bygones lightly brushed without a stroke provoked, lead me to water in effort, quit the smoke over and begun, needless to say... Done. Does she go home to list pros and cons introspect a Czechlist in comparison to other candidates before opening a heart romance like a business transact where all that matters are answers to questions sex and attractiveness interests or protests don't seem to matter much and what about me what matters to me? well, she's bubbly, hard, strict, direct but very very pretty a blonde single mom at the age of 36. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Wow....I'm not sure who wrote this, the woman, or you. Talk about a ticking time bomb here, this was mesmerizing, for as I said, who wrote this? You, or her? |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Browsed through this at first ... then read it line by line, word by word, and this was just terrific, my friend, beginning to end. j. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Kenneth, this is so emblematic for today's situation, a mirror of society's issues. Loneliness on one side, need for security on the other side. Not love is considered priority, being financially safe is ... And that is sad in a way, but crucial even for a very pretty "36 years old single mom". Excellent write. Margherita |
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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
Thanks for the compliments.  Yes, I wrote this, but I can see as I reread it that one might think she wrote it and mostly it is her perspective, mixed with mine. It is cool, I like the effect. Mostly I just free wrote it as the thoughts, sounds words just flowed from the initial inspiration. I think it is an interesting write. |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
This poem is well written, because you leave the reader thinking and wondering. Great write. Juju -Juju |
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