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icebox
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

0 posted 2012-04-13 11:24 PM

Seeking counsel in evening breeze,
birds watch aloof in perch of safety cast
in shadowed treetops knowing
apple green of early leaves will bring reality
with morning sun's chitter, chirp and song,
flocks of grackles seem amused looking down
on talking monkeys in aimless circles strutting,
as if born into importance,
like an ostentation of peacocks left alone
in self absorbed worlds of fantasy,
with too much food and too little thought.

©2012 icebox

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2012-04-14 05:29 AM

Self-imposed cockiness and preening is the order of the day as you seek relief amid a counsel of the absurd. Our animal friends can be a mirror unto ourselves if we but allow it. Nice thoughts to begin the day, Ice.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2012-04-14 05:42 AM

Love the impact of the last line. Not quite a K.O. but an appropriate downbeat that followed a rhythm of native american type drumming which is so poignantly sad...

love it, love you.

(be your own editor)

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2012-04-15 05:22 PM

Excellent write, dear Charlie.

Margherita

Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

4 posted 2012-04-16 03:35 AM

So many people in the world who do not think! Good write as usual, mr. icebox.

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

5 posted 2012-04-16 08:26 AM

...too much food and too little thought ...

yep, especially about food, on my part ...

well written my friend... enjoyed,

j.

ebonygirl
Member Elite

since 2011-07-14

Posts 2000
California U.S.A

6 posted 2012-04-16 09:11 AM

It's all in your title for me, Icebox.
Our return in life is the result of our deposits during our life. Well done, Ms. E

Juju
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since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

7 posted 2012-04-16 02:45 PM

I really liked this one

Juju

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

8 posted 2012-04-21 01:57 PM

Thank you, one and all!

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

9 posted 2012-04-23 06:50 PM

Interesting (and true) title, Charley, for an excellent poem.
Ida

[This message has been edited by Marchmadness (04-24-2012 12:04 AM).]

Amaryllis
Senior Member

since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

10 posted 2012-04-23 11:06 PM

Wonderful spring imagery, with a message...much enjoyed

Amaryllis

Startime1955
Senior Member

since 2012-04-22

Posts 1072
Alberta, Canada

11 posted 2012-04-24 11:44 AM

It brings a vision of joy and laughter for me...very well done...

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