Open Poetry #48 |
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Thoughts in the Forest |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana ![]() |
![]() Uploaded with ImageShack.us alone in the forest of my creation time speeds by like a downhill racer I watch the saplings grow each into worlds of their own as did I once upon a time I’m cold there is no fire somehow this seems much too much like a deathwatch if Heaven is my destination I wonder if I’ll like it Heaven will there be too much pomposity and ceremonial procedure could be you know and Hell certainly won’t care much for it fire and brimstone I’ve seen fire never brimstone except in a hurricane ah listen to me talking like a ninny still, the saplings keep growing stretching outward toward their own place in the forest some seem to want to leave the forest to explore a new frontier I did that a long, long time ago I stretched toward the stars and moons of sidewalk cafes blue moon saloons and ever-ready honeys swaggered down mean streets undaunted somehow survived I fled far and away from my hometown and hate kept me running I’m not running anymore but I still live with the hate I’m not so far from my hometown these days except in my heart ©Jerry Pat Bolton ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ [This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (04-10-2012 05:55 AM).] |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Like the forest of your creation Heaven could just be the way you imagine it, so imagine it to your liking! ![]() You did a very good job with this one, Jerry! ... love the image of the saplings that keep growing gloriously. Margherita |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I appreciate your kind comments, Margherita . ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
ah listen to me talking like a ninny still, the saplings keep growing stretching outward toward their own place in the forest ~*~ Ah, considering my current "read" I can see the bent of your mind and how it reaches, ever reaches in finding its own place. Well done, m'friend. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
That,then, is the wonderful thing about poetry, no matter how we slice it, it is about the poet . . . Thank you Karlie . . . ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Your stylus is in the right groove in this one, Jerry. This is beautiful soul music. And the picture amplifies the intensity of the song. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thanks Ice. Every so often I seem to have the need to vent one more time about something I have never been able to, and doubt that I ever will, forgive. Whatever good that happened to me during my formative years are grossly overshadowed by the crime wrought upon my heart. To this very day this crime rips me anew. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
your haunted past you create beautiful poetry with...it is a gift. ![]() Lori |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Yeah, a double-edged sword kinda gift maybe, Lori. Thank you for saying so. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Jerry, I'm impressed - wonderful piece, I'd have to call it my favorite of all I've read of you... j. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, J, for your wonderful comments about "Thoughts in the Forest," they are much appreciated. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
I really like this poem, JP. It is smooth, like your voice, I imagine. The story, although sad, is alive in the flow of life. Ms. E |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Ah, Ms. E, you do know how to strum a guy's feeling, do you not? Thank you so much for your precious comments. ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thanks, James...Jerry ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..I, too, very much enjoyed..>>spiros ~~ |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Thank you, Spiros . . . ~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~ |
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