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I Was Here
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I Was Here |
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Gunslinger Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 901TX, USA 
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You’ll find in every dungeon- A wall of infamy… Names and dates of passage, Inscribed for all to see. The passion of we humans- To make our mark on time: Chiseled On a wall of stone, Composed in lines of rhyme. What is the message? One may ask. It is merely: “I was here! I lived, I thought, I had my dreams- Before I disappeared. I loved my women, fought my wars- Left tracks upon the land… I lived! I died! Remember me! A woman or a man. I had my hopes, knew joy or pain- Knew victory and fear… The message that I wish to leave? A thinking soul was here!” |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Very Cool, my friend ... that's a legacy we can all aspire to. j. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I guess if it weren't for the dreamers and the seekers we would know nothing of the past. I love this poem. Makes me want to go out and carve a poem into a stone. Preferably not in a dungeon. Ida |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Ah, this rings the bell of truth... that innate passion to somehow leave a mark of our passing upon this earth. Not sure what causes it but I surely have felt it inside of me, screaming at times. Never fear Gunslinger... you have certainly left your mark on the many hearts who have experienced the joy and pain of your poetry. Michael |
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Gunslinger Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 901TX, USA |
Thank you all so very much for your kind encouragement. |
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ebonygirl Member Elite
since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000California U.S.A |
Your poem has surely left an impression... Enjoyed, Ms. E |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
You most certainly were, my friend. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
John, I hope we will have many more years of you and your poetry, yet. You have hit the nail on the head - that is what we all want more than anything else - validation for our existence while we are here and to be remembered for whatever reason after we are gone. Yes, there are other things that we wish for, but that is is the primary one. Well done! I enjoy your philosophical poetry very much. Owl |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
It is merely: “I was here! I lived, I thought, I had my dreams- Before I disappeared. You will certainly leave the message of a thinking soul... I can only hope I do as well! But I hope both of us add many more messages before we disappear. Excellent write! |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Excellent!! Wow. Potent message that rings so true. Very nice. JL  Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
John...You sir have definately left your mark here on these pages of blue. A thinking poet with much to say...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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