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Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

0 posted 2012-01-25 12:02 PM

A Cold Day

Well it's a cold, cold day outside,
The wind's howling through the trees.
A bitter pain - a sweet spring rain
Stings of calloused memories.

I still hear the slamming of the door,
'Recall standing outside, looking in...
Through watered eyes, and severed ties,
Like bitter frost burning my skin.

Your words still echo in my mind,
Tearing at the essence of my heart:
"A cold day in hell," I remember well,
Before we could have a brand new start.

So for two years I've faced this world, alone,
And I've held up the best I can...
Putting back together what seemed lost forever,
The shattered pieces of this broken man.

Now I find you, all smiles, at my door;
Darling, don't say a word, I can tell...
From those sparkling eyes, agloss with lies,
Today must be a cold, cold day in hell.

Michael Anderson

I strike! It quivers in that heart
Which drives me to this end;
I draw and kiss the bloody dart,
My last-my only friend!

~Abraham Lincoln

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2012-01-25 12:12 PM

Haha!! Gotta love it . . . Close the damn door, don't let any of that Michael warmth touch her. Leave her stand outside until icicle's grown on her Pinocchio nose. Serves the wench right, thass whot I'm sayin' . . .

~*~ I gave up feeling guilty just to survive a long time ago ~*~

Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

2 posted 2012-01-25 01:38 PM

Having just recently become a "Michael fan" I think I'd better now also close the door - too damn emotional but, Wow, so really, really, great. Nice to cry for someone else but sadly I can't say "for a change" because I guess I've been doing that all my life. Okay - so the upshot is that I reckon you're a damn fine writer!

Helen

bel1e
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since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

3 posted 2012-01-25 01:42 PM

Revenge is...bittersweet sometimes...question is...did you slam that door???

Great write, Michael!

~write-on~

Amaryllis
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since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

4 posted 2012-01-26 01:00 AM

That cold day finally came, hey...it seems to have a way of doing that!

Beneath the humor is a powerful message, and a poem it's perfect vehicle. Enjoyed!

Best,
Amaryllis

tracie66
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since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

5 posted 2012-01-26 01:15 AM

very expressive write dear Micheal, I have to ask as well, did you slam that door?

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
— W. E. Channing

Nicole
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since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

6 posted 2012-01-26 06:30 AM

grinning... knowing you as well as I do, only adds to the fact that I would never want to be on the wrong side of this pen.

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

7 posted 2012-01-30 03:40 PM

Talk about a bad penny rolling back in! LOL

Through watered eyes, and severed ties,
Like bitter frost burning my skin.

There are some smiling faces that should have their noses bloodied by a slamming door... but your words are longer lasting and far more impressive. *S*

Applauding the poetry... and hoping for a warm spell... and early spring. *S*

Kit McCallum

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since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

8 posted 2012-01-30 04:51 PM

I love the rhyme scheme with the addition of the double rhymes in the 3rd lines, Michael. It adds an extra emphasis to this powerful write. Much enjoyed!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

9 posted 2012-01-30 09:45 PM

JP, oh yeah, that's door was shut pretty quick... May have even snapped that pretty little Pinocchio nose clean off.

Helen, lol... Thank you. I think... We've all had to shut a few doors in our lives I would bet. Thank you for the compliment.

Bel1e, you betcha girl, slammed it and then some.

Amaryllis, thank you Sir, I'm glad you enjoyed.

Michael

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

10 posted 2012-01-30 09:56 PM

Tracie, oh yeah, it was slammed, the shades were pulled, and the gun was loaded... just in case.  rofl

Nicole, words are very powerful things, indeed... and when used as a weapon, often leave irreparable wounding.  A lesson I've learned the hard way.

Ruth, haha, a penny?  Believe me I can think up plenty more less enchanting 5 letter words for her.

Kit, thank you so much... I'm glad you enjoyed.

Michael

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

11 posted 2012-01-31 01:01 AM

Good one, Michael, and it would be a cold day in hell before I would open up the door to all that again.
Ida

JL
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since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

12 posted 2012-02-04 12:27 PM

It would be to easy and very simple of me to say
DITTO with all the above, BUT
this is a Phenomenal write, and I'm speechless.

Enjoyed.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

13 posted 2012-02-04 07:57 AM

a story that i enjoy, time changes love and the climate of it, it can be cold in hell, what an enjoyable read,

yann

Alison

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since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

14 posted 2012-02-05 02:53 PM

You write it so well and I want to yell

DON'T OPEN THE DOOR, MICHAEL! DO NOT OPEN THAT DOOR.

But, what the hell, open it. I'd have to. Okay, I went over the top with this response. It's just how I am.

A

CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

15 posted 2013-07-15 01:42 AM

hi, couldn`t resist reading this!

-coco-

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