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Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2012-03-05 07:58 PM

A Summer Day

I would like a summer day
   Its heat, sweet sweat and salt
       To visit us in our winter years
To blossom forth the scent of youth
   Again.

In this writing it is easy to view
   The wrinkled adult of my youth
      By hands, time unforgiving, which gave away
Years of care, living, trust, kindness
   And now just look their age.

This is when one prays for arthritis
   And other itises and degrees of
      Inabilities to please, not yet
Take one’s hands, or mind, not just
   Yet. Please, God.

This is the time when minds stray
   To their memories, their accomplished minds,
      Their very essence
For remembering – which is, of course,
   The key.

I would like a summer day
   In the middle of my December
      When flowers wrest my breath away, when
My grand and great moments shine, smile ‘round me,
   And I blossom again.

KRJ
3-4-12

Gunslinger
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since 1999-10-09

Posts 901
TX, USA

1 posted 2012-03-05 08:13 PM

So would I, a lovely write, milady.

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2012-03-05 08:39 PM

"The key."--Funny you have those two words in this poem. Katrina just found a whole slew of keys, boy is she going to have fun trying to find what locks they all go to.

About summer in winter. Actually down here in the swamp we've pretty much had it all winter. This is the mildest winter I can ever recall.

I hear you on the other things too, Karilea. The wrinkles. Things that used to work that don't anymore except with the wonder drugs. You touched on a subject a lot of people will be able to relate.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

3 posted 2012-03-06 08:04 AM

"In this writing it is easy to view
  The wrinkled adult of my youth"

Ahh, dear friend, this is a powerful statement.
You admit the wrinkles, but know
That adults that have advanced in age
Are simply wrinkled children.
I see in this poem, one who understands that,
But still struggles with implications.

My feelings are that indeed there is a division,
But no seperation of  body, and spark (spirit/soul)
at any age..the key is to have faith in the spark.....

"This is the time when minds stray
   To their memories, their accomplished minds,
      Their very essence
For remembering – which is, of course,
   The key."

You have the "key"

"I would like a summer day
   In the middle of my December
      When flowers wrest my breath away, when
My grand and great moments shine, smile ‘round me,
   And I blossom again."

This poem is a reopened blossom,
Honoring your "grand, and great moments".

Like a Helleborus that shows beautiful colors
That has opened in your mid-winter.

"It is difficult
to get the news from poems
yet men die miserably every day
for lack of what is found there"
(William Carlos Williams)

[This message has been edited by ice (03-06-2012 10:15 AM).]

ebonygirl
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4 posted 2012-03-06 09:11 AM

Your summer days continue to melt the snow and our hearts, Ms. Sunshine! Beautiful poetry... Beautiful woman.
Ms. E

secondhanddreampoet
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5 posted 2012-03-06 11:01 AM

very fine!

tracie66
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Posts 4713
Australia

6 posted 2012-03-06 09:02 PM

Oh so beautiful - lot's of different emotions in this, loved it!

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
— W. E. Channing

JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2012-03-07 12:02 PM

Enjoyed...James

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

8 posted 2012-03-13 03:50 PM

Ah, dear lady... I understand entirely too much of this... and you've written it so well. *S* But we are winter's children... and will find our warmth even without summer's sweat. *S*

JL
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Texas, USA

9 posted 2012-03-13 07:33 PM

"I would like a summer day
   In the middle of my December
      When flowers wrest my breath away, when
My grand and great moments shine, smile ‘round me,
   And I blossom again."

Wow...
You strum heart strings and sing a beautiful song here, Sunshine.  Warmly written for warmer days ahead.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Strummer
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since 2012-03-14

Posts 12

10 posted 2012-03-16 09:54 PM

I would like a summer day
   Its heat, sweet sweat and salt
       To visit us in our winter years
To blossom forth the scent of youth
   Again.

How interesting, for they are always there. Just lay back in the field, looking at the changing shapes of clouds, until your eye lid closes and memories swirl til you are as you see yourself again, for that is what you are, not the one in the mirror, but in the mirror of life where all is as was. An excellent poem in all ways

[This message has been edited by Strummer (03-16-2012 10:25 PM).]

Pilgrimage
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Posts 3945
Texas, USA

11 posted 2012-03-26 04:05 PM

Oh yes, me too. You said this so well, and I've thought it often, but never in just this way.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

splashMeadow
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12 posted 2012-03-26 04:27 PM

We have had just the sort of bright sunny weather in the south of England today that dispels all thoughts of "other itises". Great poem, loved the final verse - a very uplifting ending!

RMW
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Posts 1424

13 posted 2012-03-27 04:48 PM

Me, too.

Alison

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14 posted 2012-04-02 01:26 AM

Sweet poet, you touch so many. Maybe you are our summer day in December. Love you.

A

Robert Frazier
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15 posted 2012-04-04 05:35 PM

Can I borrow one of your summer days to melt a cold heart?

ken206573
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16 posted 2012-04-05 12:43 PM

Sweet poem, your as young as your written dear Sunshine. Brightening our days with your sunshine poetry.

Joyce Johnson

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since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

17 posted 2012-04-05 12:58 PM

How nicely you have put this dear Sunshine. I too would like to have that summer day in the midst of my Decembers but thank you dear Lord for letting me see my Decembers and the privilige of enjoying the summer days of those close to me. Great writing. I enjoyed.
Love, Joyce

D.Lester Young
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since 2001-12-08

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Austin, Tx

18 posted 2012-04-05 03:14 PM

The mystical weave of your verse is such a delight to behold that your are always left consoled.

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

19 posted 2012-04-13 06:12 PM

Me to, I'd like the same summer day.

Ain't it the truth?

Well done Karilea, I see you're still as proficient at expression as ever.
Wait til I get my legs working well and I'll come over there and give ya a hug!

Not yet, please God.....smile....

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

20 posted 2012-04-17 04:01 AM

Lovely poem, Sunshine.I wouldn't mind having one of those "summer days" myself.
ida

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