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Prasad Nataraj
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0 posted 2013-12-20 07:53 AM


Pratiksalya

Dew soaked naked blades of still grass,
Collect reluctant rays of the morning sun,
While sounds of Coucal break the glass,
Tailor birds rest, in nests, they spun,

Last of the soft cotton burst from its breast,
Fickle leaves dance their way through streets,
While adamant mist on window is a guest,
Great egrets flew away leaving behind cold receipts,

Wild goose cuddled their bitter nights now,
Shy moon beams lit those pratiksalya walls,
While harvested fields no longer kiss the plough,
King of frost has arrived! I hear his winter calls.

©Prasad.N 19th December 2013.
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"The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts"
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paderewski
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1 posted 2013-12-20 10:03 AM


I liked this very much, Prasad. You gave the setting of you poem a very neat touch by the way you personalizing the blades of grass, the leavings of the egrets. Excellent poem.

~*~ Your fences need to be horse-high, pig-tight and bull-strong. ~*~

2islander2
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2 posted 2013-12-20 10:58 AM


Hello Prasad, i find the poem beautiful, and I read it loud, it was living and melodious, the images are really splendid and appropriate, thanks for the poem

have a nice day

yann


Margherita
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3 posted 2013-12-20 12:59 PM


Very beautiful poem, dear Prasad. I enjoyed every line. Couldn't find out what "pratiksalya" is? So nice to see you back!


Margherita

Prasad Nataraj
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since 2008-05-29
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4 posted 2013-12-21 02:04 AM


Hi Jerry, thank you for your kind words. So glad to know you liked my attempt.Aprreciate you taking time to read and commenting.
Hi Yann, thank you for your kind words. Appreciate you taking time to read it loud. Appreciate you commenting too.You too have a nice day.
Dear Margherita, thank you for kind words. Pratiksalya is a Sanskrit word for Waiting room. Appreciate you taking time to read and commenting. Best regards.Prasad.N

"The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts"
prasadnatarajan5.blogspot.com/

Marchmadness
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5 posted 2013-12-22 01:55 AM


Fine writing, Prasad.
                 Ida

OLIAS
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6 posted 2013-12-22 09:27 PM


This is very well crafted, I liked the imagery of nature with carefully picked descriptive words that are a little out of the ordinary, makes for a beautiful descriptive poem , I like your style sir,  be well and Happy Holidays Olias

Is this heaven?

shoeless Joe Jackson.

Prasad Nataraj
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since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149
Bangalore,India
7 posted 2013-12-24 11:53 AM


Hi Ida, thank you for your kind words.Appreciate you taking time to read and commenting. Good to hear from you.
Hi Olias, thank you for your kind words. Appreciate you taking time to read and commenting. Happy Holidays to you too. Best regards,Prasad.N

"The secret behind survival of mankind is kindness and love within our hearts"
prasadnatarajan5.blogspot.com/

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